陳霈絃(961002009, Joyce Chen)
Professor Liang
English Composition 2A
Jan. 10, 2009
Cosmetic surgery, the emerging culture and its relationship with social surroundings?
The trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world and become prosperous recently. It’s not difficult to find that our lives are gradually overwhelmed by the massive images and the commercial advertisement about the reports of cosmetic surgeries. However, how the cosmetic surgery tends to be a social phenomenon? Actually, under the influence of the intense media’s power and the change of the social values toward the aesthetic, the idea of the plastic surgery is much more acceptable and popular than before.
Generally, modern people are more conscious of the images they present in front of the public. In fact, the judgments and impressions from others mostly play the key factors which affect the way people survey themselves. Therefore, we care what other people look us and are easily affected by the majority’s opinions which dominate the orientation of the social values. That is to say, the public attitudes toward the aesthetic, however, become the standards we fit to ourselves.
In the modern times, people have more high standards about their outer beauty. Due to the importance of the beauty has been highlighted in this modern time; the pursuit of the good look gradually becomes the trend that people are crazy about. Thanks to the advancement of the technology, the cosmetic surgery becomes the popular way that offers people the chance to improve their outside appearance to be more attractive. Having a more appealing look indeed strengthens one people’s confidence and besides satisfies people’s self-appraisal. Therefore, this kind of change can explains why the cosmetic surgery becomes the emerging culture in the modern times.
Actually, under the influences of the intense media’s power and the change of social values toward the aesthetic, the plastic surgery is no longer an ordinary surgical operation. The motive for the plastic surgery has transferred from the simple reconstruction of the innate defects to the pursuit of the perfect and gorgeous looks. This kind of transformation of cosmetic surgery to some extent reflects not only the change of the social values toward aesthetic and people’s attitude toward this technology.
Over the years, the primary motive of doing cosmetic surgery is to improve people’s appearances to be more attractive. In fact, the standards of aesthetics which dominate our way of looking ourselves have the relationship with the power of self-image. In fact, the inner version of how one person looks himself accounts for some elements we survey the values of ourselves. This inner version can be called self-image. Self image is the mental picture of what we think and look ourselves from our point of views. It’s just like a mirror which reflects the way we present out and gives us the reference to conform with. In the daily lives we may be unconsciously influenced by the images which creepily stores in our minds which called self-schema. The schema is the construction of our images dominates the private sides of our minds.
In truth, the good self-image has relation with the development of one person’s mental attitudes which might indirectly lead to different out looks on his lives. One of the articles published in the journal of American Salesman called power of self-image psychology, putting much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives. In fact, the power of self-image to some extent influences the thoughts of people in an indirect way. For instance, this article concerns that having a good self-image is one of the key elements of having a more positives life. Thus those who have greater self-images are more confident of presenting in front of the public and sometimes are more willing to take risks. It means that those who are more optimistic about lives have more opportunities of being successful than those who have poor self-images.
The text apparently supports the ideas of how great impact self-image make on human beings. In fact, people are more conscious of the importance of the self-image and know well the benefits and advantages they could receive from a better self-image. Therefore, people are trying hard to find ways to improve their appearances. Being attractive builds up a greater self-image and thus enhances the confidence people have toward their lives.
One of the series of the TV program in America has also discussed about the issue of the self-image. The topic of the clip Image and self image mainly focused on how to do with self-esteem and its relationship to our feeling about how we look-our general appearances. The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
Undoubtedly the self- image really has influence on the way we survey ourselves and the attitude we have toward lives. However, the standards of how we survey ourselves sometimes not only have relationship with self-image but also under the influences of the social values mostly. The public ideas and judgments sometimes are the standards which we always identify with. As I mention before, people are getting more consciousness that the pursuit of the better appearance is much more valued than before. Thus, the images we present in front of the others are important and sometimes are the impressions we leave to the public. To leave a good impression on the others, a better appearance is definitely under the consideration. This phenomenon gradually dominates the social values. We can find that in the modern society, the physical perfection one person pursuits of is basically built up under the high standards of the appearance.
Besides the factors discussed above, the intense media’s power and the cultural surroundings also play the important factors which affected the social values people have about self-image and the appearance; moreover, encouraging people to do cosmetic surgery. Over the years, our lives are overwhelmed by the great deal of the advertisement about the cosmetic surgery which highlights the magic effectiveness of the surgery. Moreover, by means of the prosperous media tools such as the magazine, newspaper, and the internet, people are much easily to receive the news and the massive images of the celebrities and famous idols. Actually, people maybe gradually influenced by these images and the ideas they publicize. The beauty and the fabulous features of those famous celebrities and idols are the patterns we would like to imitate. It seems that beauty has been highlighted and been viewed as the important factor in competing with others.
Indeed, the idea of cosmetic surgery is widespread in this modern time. In the article publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly Surgeons Enhance Patients’ Self-image points out the overall phenomenon of the cosmetic surgery. “If you do opt for a cosmetic procedure, you will join more than 10 million of your fellow Americans who had such procedures in 2005. This number represents an increase of 11 percent over the previous years and a startling 38 percent increase since 2000.” This study gives us the approximate number of the Americans who are taking the surgery. The uprising numbers show that more and more people are choosing plastic surgery as the way to improve their appearances. In the early time when cosmetic surgery is not so popular and acceptable, the only way to make oneself look more beautiful is by cosmetics. It is not difficult to find that most brands of cosmetic products claim the remarkable effectiveness after use, which appeals lots of beauty-pursuers to try.
However, as people have much higher standards about aesthetic, the make-up products are no longer sufficient for those who want to pursue the quicker way of becoming attractive once and for all. Instead, they are more apt to think of the cosmetics as the way to change their appearances which they have seldom thought of before. Therefore, this phenomenon indirectly contributes to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year. The popularity of the cosmetic surgery however represents a kind of new trend and new ideas of this modern time.
Although the pursuit of attractiveness and good identification may be the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery, it doesn’t mean that those who take surgery are superficial. Actually, pursuing the beauty thing is a kind of human nature which is difficult to be eliminated. Having a good look is the dream of everybody’s. We all have desires to see the beautiful image of ourselves in the mirror. By doing the cosmetic surgery, we could attain what we can not attain before. The happiness and confidence which come from the satisfaction of having good-looking are exactly the human nature of making ourselves pleased.
The cosmetic surgery not only improves one person’s appearance but also enhances the confidence of one person. That’s why more and more people choose this way in order to make a big change. In this beauty- dominated society, we must indeed try hard to find the way to make ourselves look better and attractive. The host of one of the American TV series also agrees that beauty really does matter. In fact, we are living in an ideal world that we would just accept for the way that we are completely unnatural. Therefore, we don’t need to lie to ourselves that the first impression people have of us doesn’t matter at all.
Moreover, most people have consciousness that the first impression we leave in other people’s mind is really important. It is a realistic world which beauty and material enjoyment dominated all. The way we look and present decide what kind of person we are, and sometimes we would be labeled by the comments people give to us. Therefore, in order to be the focus of the attention and leave a good impression in the public, a better appearance is definitely significant and necessary.
However, the host is not telling us that a better appearance triumphs all. She is not persuading people to pursue the ultimate beauty or magnifying the importance of appearance. Instead, we should be at least conscious of some basis when presenting out in front of the public. First, the general cleanness and the smiles are the basic principles we should learn. The freshness and cleanness of a person would be the bonuses and may leave a good impression on people. Second, an appropriate dressing is also significant. It doesn’t mean that the glamorous clothes are the best choices. Instead, the clothes should complement your body shape and balance in harmony. Moreover, a good dressing can show you personal style and personality, but be care that- don’t over do it. And don’t fall into the fashion victims.
Undoubtedly, the pursuit of the beauty is a kind of natural instincts. In addition, having a gorgeous look as the famous stars is the dream of everybody. However, the appearance of a person is born with that we can not change. Nevertheless, the medical technology of cosmetic surgery becomes the way people could improve their looks they expect to have. That’s why the cosmetic surgery becomes the trend that people catch up with.
As a matter of fact, people indeed have the right to be attractive and pursue beautiful looks. However, the most important thing is that we should like our looks and accept the way we are born with. The cosmetic surgery indeed provides us the convenient method of making ourselves look better.
No matter one person takes the cosmetic surgery for the aesthetics reasons or for the construction of the innate defects; we should respect his choice and offer some appropriate advice to help him not to over pursue the beauty. Diane Gerber, the author of the book 100 Questions and Answers about Plastic Surgery says that “You should be able to clearly define your desire to improve aging or to enhance facial or body appearance. Others may support you in your decision, but the decision to have plastic surgery should be yours alone."
The cosmetic surgery really tends to be an emerging culture in these recent years. Apparently, from the above study of the relationship between the cosmetic surgery and the social surroundings, we can find that the self-reflection, the social values about the aesthetics and the popularization of the media all influence and change people’s attitudes toward the cosmetic surgery. The higher acceptance of this new medical surgery represents a kind of revolution of the traditional attitude toward cosmetic surgery. Definitely, this technologic surgery really provides modern people with a convenient and quick way of changing the appearance and even the attitude toward life.
References
Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Surgeons Enhance Patients’ Self-Image. Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
Diane Gerber,& Marie Czenko Kuechel(2005). 100 Questions and Answers About Plastic Surgery.
Self-Image.From Wikipedia: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Self_image
2009年1月10日 星期六
Final Paper Draft
陳霈絃(961002009, Joyce Chen)
Professor Liang
English Composition 2A
Jan. 10, 2009
Cosmetic surgery, the emerging culture and its relationship with social surroundings.
The trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world and become prosperous recently. It’s not difficult to find that our lives are gradually overwhelmed by the massive images and the commercial advertisement about the reports of cosmetic surgeries. However, how the cosmetic surgery tends to be a social phenomenon? Actually, under the influence of the intense media’s power and the change of the social values toward the aesthetic, the idea of the plastic surgery is much more acceptable and popular than before.
Generally, modern people are more conscious of the images they present in front of the public. In fact, the judgments and impressions from others mostly play the key factors which affect the way people survey themselves. Therefore, we care what other people look us and are easily affected by the majority’s opinions which dominate the orientation of the social values. That is to say, the public attitudes toward the aesthetic, however, become the standards we fit to ourselves.
In the modern times, people have more high standards about their outer beauty. Due to the importance of the beauty has been highlighted in this modern time; the pursuit of the good look gradually becomes the trend that people are crazy about. Thanks to the advancement of the technology, the cosmetic surgery becomes the popular way that offers people the chance to improve their outside appearance to be more attractive. Having a more appealing look indeed strengthens one people’s confidence and besides satisfies people’s self-appraisal. Therefore, this kind of change can explains why the cosmetic surgery becomes the emerging culture in the modern times.
Actually, under the influences of the intense media’s power and the change of social values toward the aesthetic, the plastic surgery is no longer an ordinary surgical operation. The motive for the plastic surgery has transferred from the simple reconstruction of the innate defects to the pursuit of the perfect and gorgeous looks. This kind of transformation of cosmetic surgery to some extent reflects not only the change of the social values toward aesthetic and people’s attitude toward this technology.
Over the years, the primary motive of doing cosmetic surgery is to improve people’s appearances to be more attractive. In fact, the standards of aesthetics which dominate our way of looking ourselves have the relationship with the power of self-image. In fact, the inner version of how one person looks himself accounts for some elements we survey the values of ourselves. This inner version can be called self-image. Self image is the mental picture of what we think and look ourselves from our point of views. It’s just like a mirror which reflects the way we present out and gives us the reference to conform with. In the daily lives we may be unconsciously influenced by the images which creepily stores in our minds which called self-schema. The schema is the construction of our images dominates the private sides of our minds.
In truth, the good self-image has relation with the development of one person’s mental attitudes which might indirectly lead to different out looks on his lives. One of the articles published in the journal of American Salesman called power of self-image psychology, putting much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives. In fact, the power of self-image to some extent influences the thoughts of people in an indirect way. For instance, this article concerns that having a good self-image is one of the key elements of having a more positives life. Thus those who have greater self-images are more confident of presenting in front of the public and sometimes are more willing to take risks. It means that those who are more optimistic about lives have more opportunities of being successful than those who have poor self-images.
The text apparently supports the ideas of how great impact self-image make on human beings. In fact, people are more conscious of the importance of the self-image and know well the benefits and advantages they could receive from a better self-image. Therefore, people are trying hard to find ways to improve their appearances. Being attractive builds up a greater self-image and thus enhances the confidence people have toward their lives.
One of the series of the TV program in America has also discussed about the issue of the self-image. The topic of the clip Image and self image mainly focused on how to do with self-esteem and its relationship to our feeling about how we look-our general appearances. The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
Undoubtedly the self- image really has influence on the way we survey ourselves and the attitude we have toward lives. However, the standards of how we survey ourselves sometimes not only have relationship with self-image but also under the influences of the social values mostly. The public ideas and judgments sometimes are the standards which we always identify with. As I mention before, people are getting more consciousness that the pursuit of the better appearance is much more valued than before. Thus, the images we present in front of the others are important and sometimes are the impressions we leave to the public. To leave a good impression on the others, a better appearance is definitely under the consideration. This phenomenon gradually dominates the social values. We can find that in the modern society, the physical perfection one person pursuits of is basically built up under the high standards of the appearance.
Besides the relationship, the intense media’s power and the cultural surroundings also play the important factors which affected the social values people have about self-image and the appearance. Over the years, our lives are overwhelmed by the great deal of the advertisement about the cosmetic surgery which highlights the magic effectiveness of the surgery. Moreover, by means of the prosperous media tools such as the magazine, newspaper, and the internet, people are much easily to receive the news and the massive images of the celebrities and famous idols. Actually, people maybe gradually influenced by these images and the ideas they publicize. The beauty and the fabulous features of those famous celebrities and idols are the patterns we would like to imitate. It seems that beauty has been highlighted and been viewed as the important factor in competing with others.
Indeed, the idea of cosmetic surgery is widespread in this modern time. In the article publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly Surgeons Enhance Patients’ Self-image points out the overall phenomenon of the cosmetic surgery. “If you do opt for a cosmetic procedure, you will join more than 10 million of your fellow Americans who had such procedures in 2005. This number represents an increase of 11 percent over the previous years and a startling 38 percent increase since 2000.” This study gives us the approximate number of the Americans who are taking the surgery. The uprising numbers show that more and more people are choosing plastic surgery as the way to improve their appearances. In the early time when cosmetic surgery is not so popular and acceptable, the only way to make oneself look more beautiful is by cosmetics. It is not difficult to find that most brands of cosmetic products claim the remarkable effectiveness after use, which appeals lots of beauty-pursuers to try.
However, as people have much higher standards about aesthetic, the make-up products are no longer sufficient for those who want to pursue the quicker way of becoming attractive once and for all. Instead, they are more apt to think of the cosmetics as the way to change their appearances which they have seldom thought of before. Therefore, this phenomenon indirectly contributes to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year. The popularity of the cosmetic surgery however represents a kind of new trend and new ideas of this modern time.
Although the pursuit of attractiveness and good identification may be the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery, it doesn’t mean that those who take surgery are superficial. Actually, pursuing the beauty thing is a kind of human nature which is difficult to be eliminated. Having a good look is the dream of everybody’s. We all have desires to see the beautiful image of ourselves in the mirror. By doing the cosmetic surgery, we could attain what we can not attain before. The happiness and confidence which come from the satisfaction of having good-looking are exactly the human nature of making ourselves pleased.
The cosmetic surgery not only improves one person’s appearance but also enhances the confidence of one person. That’s why more and more people choose this way in order to make a big change. In this beauty- dominated society, we must indeed try hard to find the way to make ourselves look better and attractive. The host of one of the American TV series also agrees that beauty really does matter. In fact, we are living in an ideal world that we would just accept for the way that we are completely unnatural. Therefore, we don’t need to lie to ourselves that the first impression people have of us doesn’t matter at all.
Moreover, most people have consciousness that the first impression we leave in other people’s mind is really important. It is a realistic world which beauty and material enjoyment dominated all. The way we look and present decide what kind of person we are, and sometimes we would be labeled by the comments people give to us. Therefore, in order to be the focus of the attention and leave a good impression in the public, a better appearance is definitely significant and necessary.
However, the host is not telling us that a better appearance triumphs all. She is not persuading people to pursue the ultimate beauty or magnifying the importance of appearance. Instead, we should be at least conscious of some basis when presenting out in front of the public. First, the general cleanness and the smiles are the basic principles we should learn. The freshness and cleanness of a person would be the bonuses and may leave a good impression on people. Second, an appropriate dressing is also significant. It doesn’t mean that the glamorous clothes are the best choices. Instead, the clothes should complement your body shape and balance in harmony. Moreover, a good dressing can show you personal style and personality, but be care that- don’t over do it. And don’t fall into the fashion victims.
Undoubtedly, the pursuit of the beauty is a kind of natural instincts. In addition, having a gorgeous look as the famous stars is the dream of everybody. However, the appearance of a person is born with that we can not change. Nevertheless, the medical technology of cosmetic surgery becomes the way people could improve their looks they expect to have. That’s why the cosmetic surgery becomes the trend that people catch up with.
As a matter of fact, people indeed have the right to be attractive and pursue beautiful looks. However, the most important thing is that we should like our looks and accept the way we are born with. The cosmetic surgery indeed provides us the convenient method of making ourselves look better.
No matter one person takes the cosmetic surgery for the aesthetics reasons or for the construction of the innate defects; we should respect his choice and offer some appropriate advice to help him not to over pursue the beauty. Diane Gerber, the author of the book 100 Questions and Answers about Plastic Surgery says that “You should be able to clearly define your desire to improve aging or to enhance facial or body appearance. Others may support you in your decision, but the decision to have plastic surgery should be yours alone."
The cosmetic surgery really tends to be an emerging culture in these recent years. Apparently, from the above study of the relationship between the cosmetic surgery and the social surroundings, we can find that the self-reflection, the social values about the aesthetics and the popularization of the media all influence and change people’s attitudes toward the cosmetic surgery. The higher acceptance of this new medical surgery represents a kind of revolution of the traditional attitude toward cosmetic surgery. Definitely, this technologic surgery really provides modern people with a convenient and quick way of changing the appearance and even the attitude toward life.
References
Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Surgeons Enhance Patients’ Self-Image. Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
Diane Gerber,& Marie Czenko Kuechel(2005). 100 Questions and Answers About Plastic Surgery.
“Self-Image” In Wikipedia Encyclopedia. From http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Self_image
Professor Liang
English Composition 2A
Jan. 10, 2009
Cosmetic surgery, the emerging culture and its relationship with social surroundings.
The trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world and become prosperous recently. It’s not difficult to find that our lives are gradually overwhelmed by the massive images and the commercial advertisement about the reports of cosmetic surgeries. However, how the cosmetic surgery tends to be a social phenomenon? Actually, under the influence of the intense media’s power and the change of the social values toward the aesthetic, the idea of the plastic surgery is much more acceptable and popular than before.
Generally, modern people are more conscious of the images they present in front of the public. In fact, the judgments and impressions from others mostly play the key factors which affect the way people survey themselves. Therefore, we care what other people look us and are easily affected by the majority’s opinions which dominate the orientation of the social values. That is to say, the public attitudes toward the aesthetic, however, become the standards we fit to ourselves.
In the modern times, people have more high standards about their outer beauty. Due to the importance of the beauty has been highlighted in this modern time; the pursuit of the good look gradually becomes the trend that people are crazy about. Thanks to the advancement of the technology, the cosmetic surgery becomes the popular way that offers people the chance to improve their outside appearance to be more attractive. Having a more appealing look indeed strengthens one people’s confidence and besides satisfies people’s self-appraisal. Therefore, this kind of change can explains why the cosmetic surgery becomes the emerging culture in the modern times.
Actually, under the influences of the intense media’s power and the change of social values toward the aesthetic, the plastic surgery is no longer an ordinary surgical operation. The motive for the plastic surgery has transferred from the simple reconstruction of the innate defects to the pursuit of the perfect and gorgeous looks. This kind of transformation of cosmetic surgery to some extent reflects not only the change of the social values toward aesthetic and people’s attitude toward this technology.
Over the years, the primary motive of doing cosmetic surgery is to improve people’s appearances to be more attractive. In fact, the standards of aesthetics which dominate our way of looking ourselves have the relationship with the power of self-image. In fact, the inner version of how one person looks himself accounts for some elements we survey the values of ourselves. This inner version can be called self-image. Self image is the mental picture of what we think and look ourselves from our point of views. It’s just like a mirror which reflects the way we present out and gives us the reference to conform with. In the daily lives we may be unconsciously influenced by the images which creepily stores in our minds which called self-schema. The schema is the construction of our images dominates the private sides of our minds.
In truth, the good self-image has relation with the development of one person’s mental attitudes which might indirectly lead to different out looks on his lives. One of the articles published in the journal of American Salesman called power of self-image psychology, putting much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives. In fact, the power of self-image to some extent influences the thoughts of people in an indirect way. For instance, this article concerns that having a good self-image is one of the key elements of having a more positives life. Thus those who have greater self-images are more confident of presenting in front of the public and sometimes are more willing to take risks. It means that those who are more optimistic about lives have more opportunities of being successful than those who have poor self-images.
The text apparently supports the ideas of how great impact self-image make on human beings. In fact, people are more conscious of the importance of the self-image and know well the benefits and advantages they could receive from a better self-image. Therefore, people are trying hard to find ways to improve their appearances. Being attractive builds up a greater self-image and thus enhances the confidence people have toward their lives.
One of the series of the TV program in America has also discussed about the issue of the self-image. The topic of the clip Image and self image mainly focused on how to do with self-esteem and its relationship to our feeling about how we look-our general appearances. The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
Undoubtedly the self- image really has influence on the way we survey ourselves and the attitude we have toward lives. However, the standards of how we survey ourselves sometimes not only have relationship with self-image but also under the influences of the social values mostly. The public ideas and judgments sometimes are the standards which we always identify with. As I mention before, people are getting more consciousness that the pursuit of the better appearance is much more valued than before. Thus, the images we present in front of the others are important and sometimes are the impressions we leave to the public. To leave a good impression on the others, a better appearance is definitely under the consideration. This phenomenon gradually dominates the social values. We can find that in the modern society, the physical perfection one person pursuits of is basically built up under the high standards of the appearance.
Besides the relationship, the intense media’s power and the cultural surroundings also play the important factors which affected the social values people have about self-image and the appearance. Over the years, our lives are overwhelmed by the great deal of the advertisement about the cosmetic surgery which highlights the magic effectiveness of the surgery. Moreover, by means of the prosperous media tools such as the magazine, newspaper, and the internet, people are much easily to receive the news and the massive images of the celebrities and famous idols. Actually, people maybe gradually influenced by these images and the ideas they publicize. The beauty and the fabulous features of those famous celebrities and idols are the patterns we would like to imitate. It seems that beauty has been highlighted and been viewed as the important factor in competing with others.
Indeed, the idea of cosmetic surgery is widespread in this modern time. In the article publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly Surgeons Enhance Patients’ Self-image points out the overall phenomenon of the cosmetic surgery. “If you do opt for a cosmetic procedure, you will join more than 10 million of your fellow Americans who had such procedures in 2005. This number represents an increase of 11 percent over the previous years and a startling 38 percent increase since 2000.” This study gives us the approximate number of the Americans who are taking the surgery. The uprising numbers show that more and more people are choosing plastic surgery as the way to improve their appearances. In the early time when cosmetic surgery is not so popular and acceptable, the only way to make oneself look more beautiful is by cosmetics. It is not difficult to find that most brands of cosmetic products claim the remarkable effectiveness after use, which appeals lots of beauty-pursuers to try.
However, as people have much higher standards about aesthetic, the make-up products are no longer sufficient for those who want to pursue the quicker way of becoming attractive once and for all. Instead, they are more apt to think of the cosmetics as the way to change their appearances which they have seldom thought of before. Therefore, this phenomenon indirectly contributes to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year. The popularity of the cosmetic surgery however represents a kind of new trend and new ideas of this modern time.
Although the pursuit of attractiveness and good identification may be the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery, it doesn’t mean that those who take surgery are superficial. Actually, pursuing the beauty thing is a kind of human nature which is difficult to be eliminated. Having a good look is the dream of everybody’s. We all have desires to see the beautiful image of ourselves in the mirror. By doing the cosmetic surgery, we could attain what we can not attain before. The happiness and confidence which come from the satisfaction of having good-looking are exactly the human nature of making ourselves pleased.
The cosmetic surgery not only improves one person’s appearance but also enhances the confidence of one person. That’s why more and more people choose this way in order to make a big change. In this beauty- dominated society, we must indeed try hard to find the way to make ourselves look better and attractive. The host of one of the American TV series also agrees that beauty really does matter. In fact, we are living in an ideal world that we would just accept for the way that we are completely unnatural. Therefore, we don’t need to lie to ourselves that the first impression people have of us doesn’t matter at all.
Moreover, most people have consciousness that the first impression we leave in other people’s mind is really important. It is a realistic world which beauty and material enjoyment dominated all. The way we look and present decide what kind of person we are, and sometimes we would be labeled by the comments people give to us. Therefore, in order to be the focus of the attention and leave a good impression in the public, a better appearance is definitely significant and necessary.
However, the host is not telling us that a better appearance triumphs all. She is not persuading people to pursue the ultimate beauty or magnifying the importance of appearance. Instead, we should be at least conscious of some basis when presenting out in front of the public. First, the general cleanness and the smiles are the basic principles we should learn. The freshness and cleanness of a person would be the bonuses and may leave a good impression on people. Second, an appropriate dressing is also significant. It doesn’t mean that the glamorous clothes are the best choices. Instead, the clothes should complement your body shape and balance in harmony. Moreover, a good dressing can show you personal style and personality, but be care that- don’t over do it. And don’t fall into the fashion victims.
Undoubtedly, the pursuit of the beauty is a kind of natural instincts. In addition, having a gorgeous look as the famous stars is the dream of everybody. However, the appearance of a person is born with that we can not change. Nevertheless, the medical technology of cosmetic surgery becomes the way people could improve their looks they expect to have. That’s why the cosmetic surgery becomes the trend that people catch up with.
As a matter of fact, people indeed have the right to be attractive and pursue beautiful looks. However, the most important thing is that we should like our looks and accept the way we are born with. The cosmetic surgery indeed provides us the convenient method of making ourselves look better.
No matter one person takes the cosmetic surgery for the aesthetics reasons or for the construction of the innate defects; we should respect his choice and offer some appropriate advice to help him not to over pursue the beauty. Diane Gerber, the author of the book 100 Questions and Answers about Plastic Surgery says that “You should be able to clearly define your desire to improve aging or to enhance facial or body appearance. Others may support you in your decision, but the decision to have plastic surgery should be yours alone."
The cosmetic surgery really tends to be an emerging culture in these recent years. Apparently, from the above study of the relationship between the cosmetic surgery and the social surroundings, we can find that the self-reflection, the social values about the aesthetics and the popularization of the media all influence and change people’s attitudes toward the cosmetic surgery. The higher acceptance of this new medical surgery represents a kind of revolution of the traditional attitude toward cosmetic surgery. Definitely, this technologic surgery really provides modern people with a convenient and quick way of changing the appearance and even the attitude toward life.
References
Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Surgeons Enhance Patients’ Self-Image. Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
Diane Gerber,& Marie Czenko Kuechel(2005). 100 Questions and Answers About Plastic Surgery.
“Self-Image” In Wikipedia Encyclopedia. From http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Self_image
2009年1月8日 星期四
Msn peer discussion 3 - Research Question
蘇菲亞 說:
1. Paper outlines including the title and 1-3 keywords (e.g., euthanasia, gay and lesbian marriage, animal rights, etc). Do you search information using these keywords? In English or Chinese? Why?
Title: Could Gay be Gay?
Key words: Gay
I do research information through this keyword in both English and Chinese because I think that I could gather more information on the topic by doing so.
蘇菲亞 說:
However, I found mostly English version.
Elsa 說:
You just use a key word "Gay"?
蘇菲亞 說:
Yes
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and then you could find many articles
蘇菲亞 說:
now that it is a broad topic it is easy to find information.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so great and convenient
Elsa 說:
Then, you must be tired to find the information you want. Because there are too many information
Claire 說:
Both English and Chinese?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and maybe you can narrow your key words
蘇菲亞 說:
But I ONLY USE ONE WORD
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so the information you find may to be too broad for you
Elsa 說:
That's ok. If you can find the source you want.
Claire 說:
There must have lots of article
Elsa 說:
But you might spend more time.
蘇菲亞 說:
So what do you think I shoul;ld type?
Claire 說:
So you do the topic in extensive way?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the topic you choose may to broad for you
蘇菲亞 說:
SO WHAT SHOULD I DO
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
you can try to key in the keywords longer and explain detailly about your subject
Elsa 說:
It depends on what aspects you want to discuss.
Claire 說:
To narrow down the certain point of gay
蘇菲亞 說:
OK
蘇菲亞 說:
( 1 )
Ideology- Queer Cinema.
Louis Giannetti (1997). Understanding Movies, the eleventh edition, p.483-p.489. New jersey.
Intended audiences: Those who are interested in analyzing movies.
I think that it is quite interesting for it explain the ideology on homosexuality by analyzing the movies through media that we are familiar with.
蘇菲亞 說:
This is my citation
蘇菲亞 說:
The answer to the second question
蘇菲亞 說:
( 2 )
Gay Genes, Revisited.
LeVay, Tim; Hamer. Scientific American(1994, May), Vol. 270 Issue 5, p44, 6p Abstract: Two pieces of evidence, a structure within the human brain and a genetic link, point to a biological component for male homosexuality [ABSTRACT FROM PUBLISHER] (AN 14327844)
Intended audiences: Academic paper.
蘇菲亞 說:
The author gave out some results of the experiments and tries to convince the readers his point of view.
Difficulties: Some of the concepts in the articles are expressed in the scientific way. Thus, I may feel confused.
蘇菲亞 說:
Do Gays Have a Choice?
Epstein, Robert. Scientific American Mind, Feb/Mar2006, Vol. 17 Issue 1, p50, 8p Abstract: Science offers a clear and surprising answer to a controversial question [ABSTRACT FROM AUTHOR] (AN 23432303)
From http://web.ebscohost.com/ehost/pdf?vid=3&hid=3&sid=0ef80f05-7ac0-4011-a81c-1967ab28d5c1%40sessionmgr9
Intended audiences: Academic paper.
蘇菲亞 說:
The author stated different factors in the article that explain the cause of the sexual tendency. He did make his idea clear.
蘇菲亞 說:
( 4 )
Anonymous (September 7, 2004). Taiwan.
Web Site: http://www.jamessteed.com/gayson/gayson.htm
Intended audiences: General people. The web site contained the explanation of homosexuality so that people may get more information on the topic. By knowing more information, we might have less discrimination among them.
蘇菲亞 說:
( 5 )
Could Gay be Gay?
Anonymous
Web Site: http://www.youtube.com/v/V1iEpBsNIBU&hl=zh_TW&fs=1
Intended audiences: General people. Through the explanation on the topic, most of people could get to know more about gays/ lesbians ( their thoughts for example).
蘇菲亞 說:
That's all to the second question.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the first citation :i think it is great that you use the book we have studied in this semester as your reference
蘇菲亞 說:
The fact is you have to attack me
Claire 說:
Ideology!!!Interesting!(When night is falling )
蘇菲亞 說:
I don't know whether I had do the citation properly.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the idea is great
蘇菲亞 說:
BUT
Elsa 說:
How do you use the second reference in your final paper? Since you said you are confused about that.
蘇菲亞 說:
OH YEAH
蘇菲亞 說:
I mean some of the idea it mentioned in the article.
蘇菲亞 說:
Thanks
Claire 說:
Because it's a academic paper ?
蘇菲亞 說:
I WOULD REVISE THE SENTENSE
蘇菲亞 說:
Yes
Elsa 說:
You can add that if you agree with the standpoints in the sources.
Claire 說:
Are there lot of new terms should be explained?
蘇菲亞 說:
No.
蘇菲亞 說:
It's not the term but the words it used in the articles.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so you creat th eterm by tourself?
Claire 說:
So how do you overcpme the problem?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
sorry foe misspelling
蘇菲亞 說:
3. How do you use these sources to support your own argument/opinions or as references for facts? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
I do quote some words, and sentences in my final paper because they supported my opinion.
蘇菲亞 說:
4. What revisions have you made compared to your annotations? What drives you to make revisions? Do you polish your language and pay attention to cohesion and coherence in your final paper?
I made some revisions by referring to the comments I received from peer working.
蘇菲亞 說:
5. What perspectives have you changed compared to your issue paper? Did you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
I did add my peer’s opinion in my issue paper because they pointed out the shortcomings that I did not realize before.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so do you paraphrase the qoutes
蘇菲亞 說:
Before i want to change my position and focus on the cutural environment
蘇菲亞 說:
but i found out that all of the infromation that i have found was about the scientific problems
蘇菲亞 說:
yes i do qoute
Elsa 說:
So you need to find more evidence instead of the scientific problems
Claire 說:
What words do you quote?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the most important thing is you need to paraphrase them in your own ideas
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
did you do that?(attacking)
蘇菲亞 說:
(i can feel that
蘇菲亞 說:
it's hard to say it over here
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i know that you have paraphrased them
蘇菲亞 說:
i had put the quotation mark in my paragraph
蘇菲亞 說:
actually i quote
蘇菲亞 說:
and also paraphrased
Claire 說:
Do you have coherence between the paragraph?
Elsa 說:
Some conjunctions
蘇菲亞 說:
I...am not sure about that
蘇菲亞 說:
i think i did....吧
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
do make the mistake as same as me
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
don't
Elsa 說:
Well. You can do it better when you looking your sentence again.
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
Claire 說:
Check it again!
蘇菲亞 說:
so is that all?
蘇菲亞 說:
OK!
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
when i read your annatation, i find that overally there are not some serious problems in your article
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the grammar and spelling is ok
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the coherence is not too bad
Elsa 說:
You did a good job.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
but you stll have to polish them into a btter one
Claire 說:
serious problems?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
better
Claire 說:
So?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the conjuntions
Elsa 說:
conjunctions
Claire 說:
OH! OK
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so the next parts?
Elsa 說:
I can start to present
Claire 說:
OK
Claire 說:
Abortion!
Elsa 說:
Abortion: A Serious Challenge between Morality and Women’s right
Elsa 說:
key words:abortion, women's human rights
Elsa 說:
I search the information on internet database with these words in English way. Because I want to know more about the cases and the world trend of abortion. By using the keywords, I do find many information and some of them support to my opinion.
Elsa 說:
1. Women's consideration (Reasons for abortion)
2. Human rights (Research about the abortion laws)
3. Looking from another standpoints ( the thoughts of those who anti-abortion)
Elsa 說:
That's the outlines of my paper.
Elsa 說:
2. Topics/themes in four annotations and their intended audiences
Elsa 說:
1) The first annotation is videos about the opinions of Obama, the president-elect in America. He thinks that limit the liberty of abortion may harm women's human right.
Audience:
People who care about the relationship between abortion and government.
Claire 說:
So you emphasize women's human rights?
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Elsa 說:
That's my main point.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap
Claire 說:
Do you have other position?
Claire 說:
Law ?
Claire 說:
Law of abortion!
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Claire 說:
you say you want to mention
Elsa 說:
(3) The third annotation is the world trend of abortion law.
Elsa 說:
Audience:
People who do not know the real condition about abortion around the world.
Elsa 說:
4) The fourth annotation is the reasons for those who oppose aborton.
Audience:
People who want to know why be anti-abortion
蘇菲亞 說:
I THINK THAT YOUR VIEWPOINT IS CLEAR
蘇菲亞 說:
AND PRECISE
Claire 說:
Yup~
Elsa 說:
Thank you!
Elsa 說:
3. Main points in each source that support your own argument/opinions.Do you organize the relations in discourses with a smoth connection and transition between sentences? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
(1) Obama's ideas have in common with my opinions. No woman make the decision casually.
(2) Those reasons can make people to t
Elsa 說:
(2) Those reasons can make people to think the necessity of abortion.
(3) Liberalization is the main trend of abortion laws.
(4) Show the purpose that those who oppose abortion might because some religion or the slogan of humanism, instead of caring for women and children.
Claire 說:
Is any problem you encounter in your paper?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and you make three points in your paper
蘇菲亞 說:
SO YOU QOUTE
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
discuss the three reasons
Elsa 說:
I do qoute some words in my article
Elsa 說:
But not much.
蘇菲亞 說:
OK
Claire 說:
What peron do you quote?
蘇菲亞 說:
I THINK EVERYBODY'S PROBLEMS IS THAT WE SHOULD CHECK THE SPELLING
蘇菲亞 說:
THE COHERENCE
蘇菲亞 說:
THE CONJUNCTION
Elsa 說:
Yes. So the peer feedback is important
Elsa 說:
I do add my peer's opinions, because they pointed out the weak point of my article. I know how to make my article more fluent by their opinions.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
YES I ALSO AGREE THAT
Elsa 說:
To the fifth question.
Elsa 說:
(1) The weak point of my article is that I could not deny that those unborn babies have human rights too.
Elsa 說:
2) I added more ideas to my final paper
1. The world trend
2. The uniqe condition of each woman
3. Looking from the other points of view (anti-abortion)
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
蘇菲亞 說:
so you have stated your position
蘇菲亞 說:
that's cool
Claire 說:
Pefect~
Elsa 說:
But I do not know how to conquer the weak point
Elsa 說:
I just avoid to talk about that part...
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
it is really hard to correct
蘇菲亞 說:
if i were you, i would also avoid that part...
Claire 說:
The coherence?
Elsa 說:
Well... I am not sure whether my articles is coherent or not
Claire 說:
do you work strongly?
Claire 說:
And.........
Claire 說:
you told me that you have 6 pages "only"
Elsa 說:
I would try to make my article fluent
蘇菲亞 說:
i think we should go on to the next person
Elsa 說:
Ok.
蘇菲亞 說:
what is human right
蘇菲亞 說:
i mean at the same time now
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I'M NEXT
Claire 說:
Elsa works very hard!
蘇菲亞 說:
because elsa and claire had the same topic
蘇菲亞 說:
almost the same
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
SO CLAIRE
Claire 說:
different position
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
YOUR ARE THE NEXT ONE?
Elsa 說:
So hurry up
Claire 說:
I'm ok
Elsa 說:
Tell us the outlines in your paper
Claire 說:
abotion mental health
Claire 說:
abortion
蘇菲亞 說:
together
Claire 說:
My main outline includes abortion, and I would quote others to persuade others by using lot of science research and essay. The key words are the mental help, and psychology of abortion. Most information are English, because there are much more information what I want in the foreign website.
Claire 說:
These annotations information I use is Eclipse of Reason. Bernard N. Nathanson. Jan, 1985, The effects of abortion. Lisa Tolin. Psychology Today, Jul/Aug 97,
Abortion 'leaves mental legacy. 12 December 2005. BBC News,
, and Abortion and psychology. May 17, 2007. Washington Times
蘇菲亞 說:
mental help, and psychology of abortion.
蘇菲亞 說:
so you deal with the mental problem
Claire 說:
These annotations information I use is Eclipse of Reason. Bernard N. Nathanson. Jan, 1985, The effects of abortion. Lisa Tolin. Psychology Today, Jul/Aug 97,
Abortion 'leaves mental legacy. 12 December 2005. BBC News,
, and Abortion and psychology. May 17, 2007. Washington Times
Claire 說:
Yes
Claire 說:
psychology of abortion
Elsa 說:
So how did you deal with the other points of view such as woman's right?
Claire 說:
I choose to be pro-lifer.
Elsa 說:
How did you conquer the weak point?
Claire 說:
I use others' words
蘇菲亞 說:
or baby's right
Claire 說:
such as the Pope
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap
蘇菲亞 說:
baby's psychological problem
Claire 說:
It's psychological problem of women
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i agree with sophia
Claire 說:
Do you mean that I should develop baby's psychological problem?
Claire 說:
Then I can try.
蘇菲亞 說:
no
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
if you have enough time
Claire 說:
Ok
蘇菲亞 說:
because that's also elsa's problem
Claire 說:
Thanks
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
otherwise you must reorganize your issue paper
蘇菲亞 說:
both of you focus on the adults
蘇菲亞 說:
or don't point out the word "baby"
Elsa 說:
I see.
蘇菲亞 說:
otherwise you will have confrontation in your paper
Claire 說:
OK
蘇菲亞 說:
joyce
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
ok
Claire 說:
come to Joyce!!
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
The relationship between cosmetic surgery and the self-image
Why the trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is my topic(present)
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
Focus on three parts:
1. People are getting higher and higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
2. The media, the mass images of the beautiful celebrities, and the advertisements about the cosmetic surgery
3. The self-image, self-reflection and the social values
Social values affect the way we look ourselves.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so i make a deep discussion about these three topics
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
Search information in the key words
English > “self image” “plastic surgery”
Mostly in the website of the “All Business”
http://www.allbusiness.com/
Chinese> “整形文化” “自我形象” easy to get the full ideas and easy to understand
website全國碩博士論文資訊網
http://etds.ncl.edu.tw/theabs/index.html
Elsa 說:
I think that your standpoints are clear.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
thx
蘇菲亞 說:
but
蘇菲亞 說:
i don't know your viewpoints
蘇菲亞 說:
you support?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is just the outline
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
my ideas will be in the article
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i just categoly them
蘇菲亞 說:
just remind you
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i know that i will pay more attentio non this part
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
it is also my main problem thx for Sophia
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-image psychology
American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
Claire 說:
From TV! It's cool.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
every annotation stands for one point
蘇菲亞 說:
AND SALES
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so there are three stand points
蘇菲亞 說:
YOU FIND LOTS OF INFORMATION
Elsa 說:
Don't forget to express your views when you use them.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
are you praising me?
蘇菲亞 說:
IN THE CONCLUSION PART YOU MIGHT WANT TO ORGANIZE THEM AGAIN IN BRIEF WORDS
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
The higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
The higher standard about aesthetic
>contribute to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year
The pursuit of attractiveness and good identification are the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-imThis article puts much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives.
age psychology
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself The cultural surroundings which affected the social values people have to self-image and the appearance.
The massive images of the celebrities and advertisements
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Film clip
The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
every annatation stands for one point
Elsa 說:
Do you have problems when you use these information?
蘇菲亞 說:
for example the meaning
蘇菲亞 說:
or some conflict
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yes, at first i can't find any essay on the internet
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
after a long long stuggling, i found and useful website
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
that's the begining of my annatation
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
that's why i post my articles in the blogger so late
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so sophia has pointed out that
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I do quote some phrases in my paper but not much. Mostly I paraphrase the original articles and use my own words to explain.
蘇菲亞 說:
i think that you could qoate
to be more persuasive
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Elsa 說:
Using the words from convincing resouces will helpful
Claire 說:
That's right~
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap i agree with you
i will improve that
蘇菲亞 說:
SO ANY PROBLEMS?
DID YOU CHANGE YOUR POSITION
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I THINK NOT
I AGREE WITH THE POINTS
and i agree with the attitude toward cosmetic surgery
Elsa 說:
If there is no problems...
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is the end maybe
1. Paper outlines including the title and 1-3 keywords (e.g., euthanasia, gay and lesbian marriage, animal rights, etc). Do you search information using these keywords? In English or Chinese? Why?
Title: Could Gay be Gay?
Key words: Gay
I do research information through this keyword in both English and Chinese because I think that I could gather more information on the topic by doing so.
蘇菲亞 說:
However, I found mostly English version.
Elsa 說:
You just use a key word "Gay"?
蘇菲亞 說:
Yes
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and then you could find many articles
蘇菲亞 說:
now that it is a broad topic it is easy to find information.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so great and convenient
Elsa 說:
Then, you must be tired to find the information you want. Because there are too many information
Claire 說:
Both English and Chinese?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and maybe you can narrow your key words
蘇菲亞 說:
But I ONLY USE ONE WORD
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so the information you find may to be too broad for you
Elsa 說:
That's ok. If you can find the source you want.
Claire 說:
There must have lots of article
Elsa 說:
But you might spend more time.
蘇菲亞 說:
So what do you think I shoul;ld type?
Claire 說:
So you do the topic in extensive way?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the topic you choose may to broad for you
蘇菲亞 說:
SO WHAT SHOULD I DO
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
you can try to key in the keywords longer and explain detailly about your subject
Elsa 說:
It depends on what aspects you want to discuss.
Claire 說:
To narrow down the certain point of gay
蘇菲亞 說:
OK
蘇菲亞 說:
( 1 )
Ideology- Queer Cinema.
Louis Giannetti (1997). Understanding Movies, the eleventh edition, p.483-p.489. New jersey.
Intended audiences: Those who are interested in analyzing movies.
I think that it is quite interesting for it explain the ideology on homosexuality by analyzing the movies through media that we are familiar with.
蘇菲亞 說:
This is my citation
蘇菲亞 說:
The answer to the second question
蘇菲亞 說:
( 2 )
Gay Genes, Revisited.
LeVay, Tim; Hamer. Scientific American(1994, May), Vol. 270 Issue 5, p44, 6p Abstract: Two pieces of evidence, a structure within the human brain and a genetic link, point to a biological component for male homosexuality [ABSTRACT FROM PUBLISHER] (AN 14327844)
Intended audiences: Academic paper.
蘇菲亞 說:
The author gave out some results of the experiments and tries to convince the readers his point of view.
Difficulties: Some of the concepts in the articles are expressed in the scientific way. Thus, I may feel confused.
蘇菲亞 說:
Do Gays Have a Choice?
Epstein, Robert. Scientific American Mind, Feb/Mar2006, Vol. 17 Issue 1, p50, 8p Abstract: Science offers a clear and surprising answer to a controversial question [ABSTRACT FROM AUTHOR] (AN 23432303)
From http://web.ebscohost.com/ehost/pdf?vid=3&hid=3&sid=0ef80f05-7ac0-4011-a81c-1967ab28d5c1%40sessionmgr9
Intended audiences: Academic paper.
蘇菲亞 說:
The author stated different factors in the article that explain the cause of the sexual tendency. He did make his idea clear.
蘇菲亞 說:
( 4 )
Anonymous (September 7, 2004). Taiwan.
Web Site: http://www.jamessteed.com/gayson/gayson.htm
Intended audiences: General people. The web site contained the explanation of homosexuality so that people may get more information on the topic. By knowing more information, we might have less discrimination among them.
蘇菲亞 說:
( 5 )
Could Gay be Gay?
Anonymous
Web Site: http://www.youtube.com/v/V1iEpBsNIBU&hl=zh_TW&fs=1
Intended audiences: General people. Through the explanation on the topic, most of people could get to know more about gays/ lesbians ( their thoughts for example).
蘇菲亞 說:
That's all to the second question.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the first citation :i think it is great that you use the book we have studied in this semester as your reference
蘇菲亞 說:
The fact is you have to attack me
Claire 說:
Ideology!!!Interesting!(When night is falling )
蘇菲亞 說:
I don't know whether I had do the citation properly.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the idea is great
蘇菲亞 說:
BUT
Elsa 說:
How do you use the second reference in your final paper? Since you said you are confused about that.
蘇菲亞 說:
OH YEAH
蘇菲亞 說:
I mean some of the idea it mentioned in the article.
蘇菲亞 說:
Thanks
Claire 說:
Because it's a academic paper ?
蘇菲亞 說:
I WOULD REVISE THE SENTENSE
蘇菲亞 說:
Yes
Elsa 說:
You can add that if you agree with the standpoints in the sources.
Claire 說:
Are there lot of new terms should be explained?
蘇菲亞 說:
No.
蘇菲亞 說:
It's not the term but the words it used in the articles.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so you creat th eterm by tourself?
Claire 說:
So how do you overcpme the problem?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
sorry foe misspelling
蘇菲亞 說:
3. How do you use these sources to support your own argument/opinions or as references for facts? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
I do quote some words, and sentences in my final paper because they supported my opinion.
蘇菲亞 說:
4. What revisions have you made compared to your annotations? What drives you to make revisions? Do you polish your language and pay attention to cohesion and coherence in your final paper?
I made some revisions by referring to the comments I received from peer working.
蘇菲亞 說:
5. What perspectives have you changed compared to your issue paper? Did you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
I did add my peer’s opinion in my issue paper because they pointed out the shortcomings that I did not realize before.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so do you paraphrase the qoutes
蘇菲亞 說:
Before i want to change my position and focus on the cutural environment
蘇菲亞 說:
but i found out that all of the infromation that i have found was about the scientific problems
蘇菲亞 說:
yes i do qoute
Elsa 說:
So you need to find more evidence instead of the scientific problems
Claire 說:
What words do you quote?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the most important thing is you need to paraphrase them in your own ideas
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
did you do that?(attacking)
蘇菲亞 說:
(i can feel that
蘇菲亞 說:
it's hard to say it over here
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i know that you have paraphrased them
蘇菲亞 說:
i had put the quotation mark in my paragraph
蘇菲亞 說:
actually i quote
蘇菲亞 說:
and also paraphrased
Claire 說:
Do you have coherence between the paragraph?
Elsa 說:
Some conjunctions
蘇菲亞 說:
I...am not sure about that
蘇菲亞 說:
i think i did....吧
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
do make the mistake as same as me
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
don't
Elsa 說:
Well. You can do it better when you looking your sentence again.
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
Claire 說:
Check it again!
蘇菲亞 說:
so is that all?
蘇菲亞 說:
OK!
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
when i read your annatation, i find that overally there are not some serious problems in your article
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the grammar and spelling is ok
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the coherence is not too bad
Elsa 說:
You did a good job.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
but you stll have to polish them into a btter one
Claire 說:
serious problems?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
better
Claire 說:
So?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the conjuntions
Elsa 說:
conjunctions
Claire 說:
OH! OK
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so the next parts?
Elsa 說:
I can start to present
Claire 說:
OK
Claire 說:
Abortion!
Elsa 說:
Abortion: A Serious Challenge between Morality and Women’s right
Elsa 說:
key words:abortion, women's human rights
Elsa 說:
I search the information on internet database with these words in English way. Because I want to know more about the cases and the world trend of abortion. By using the keywords, I do find many information and some of them support to my opinion.
Elsa 說:
1. Women's consideration (Reasons for abortion)
2. Human rights (Research about the abortion laws)
3. Looking from another standpoints ( the thoughts of those who anti-abortion)
Elsa 說:
That's the outlines of my paper.
Elsa 說:
2. Topics/themes in four annotations and their intended audiences
Elsa 說:
1) The first annotation is videos about the opinions of Obama, the president-elect in America. He thinks that limit the liberty of abortion may harm women's human right.
Audience:
People who care about the relationship between abortion and government.
Claire 說:
So you emphasize women's human rights?
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Elsa 說:
That's my main point.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap
Claire 說:
Do you have other position?
Claire 說:
Law ?
Claire 說:
Law of abortion!
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Claire 說:
you say you want to mention
Elsa 說:
(3) The third annotation is the world trend of abortion law.
Elsa 說:
Audience:
People who do not know the real condition about abortion around the world.
Elsa 說:
4) The fourth annotation is the reasons for those who oppose aborton.
Audience:
People who want to know why be anti-abortion
蘇菲亞 說:
I THINK THAT YOUR VIEWPOINT IS CLEAR
蘇菲亞 說:
AND PRECISE
Claire 說:
Yup~
Elsa 說:
Thank you!
Elsa 說:
3. Main points in each source that support your own argument/opinions.Do you organize the relations in discourses with a smoth connection and transition between sentences? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
(1) Obama's ideas have in common with my opinions. No woman make the decision casually.
(2) Those reasons can make people to t
Elsa 說:
(2) Those reasons can make people to think the necessity of abortion.
(3) Liberalization is the main trend of abortion laws.
(4) Show the purpose that those who oppose abortion might because some religion or the slogan of humanism, instead of caring for women and children.
Claire 說:
Is any problem you encounter in your paper?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and you make three points in your paper
蘇菲亞 說:
SO YOU QOUTE
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
discuss the three reasons
Elsa 說:
I do qoute some words in my article
Elsa 說:
But not much.
蘇菲亞 說:
OK
Claire 說:
What peron do you quote?
蘇菲亞 說:
I THINK EVERYBODY'S PROBLEMS IS THAT WE SHOULD CHECK THE SPELLING
蘇菲亞 說:
THE COHERENCE
蘇菲亞 說:
THE CONJUNCTION
Elsa 說:
Yes. So the peer feedback is important
Elsa 說:
I do add my peer's opinions, because they pointed out the weak point of my article. I know how to make my article more fluent by their opinions.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
YES I ALSO AGREE THAT
Elsa 說:
To the fifth question.
Elsa 說:
(1) The weak point of my article is that I could not deny that those unborn babies have human rights too.
Elsa 說:
2) I added more ideas to my final paper
1. The world trend
2. The uniqe condition of each woman
3. Looking from the other points of view (anti-abortion)
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
蘇菲亞 說:
so you have stated your position
蘇菲亞 說:
that's cool
Claire 說:
Pefect~
Elsa 說:
But I do not know how to conquer the weak point
Elsa 說:
I just avoid to talk about that part...
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
it is really hard to correct
蘇菲亞 說:
if i were you, i would also avoid that part...
Claire 說:
The coherence?
Elsa 說:
Well... I am not sure whether my articles is coherent or not
Claire 說:
do you work strongly?
Claire 說:
And.........
Claire 說:
you told me that you have 6 pages "only"
Elsa 說:
I would try to make my article fluent
蘇菲亞 說:
i think we should go on to the next person
Elsa 說:
Ok.
蘇菲亞 說:
what is human right
蘇菲亞 說:
i mean at the same time now
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I'M NEXT
Claire 說:
Elsa works very hard!
蘇菲亞 說:
because elsa and claire had the same topic
蘇菲亞 說:
almost the same
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
SO CLAIRE
Claire 說:
different position
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
YOUR ARE THE NEXT ONE?
Elsa 說:
So hurry up
Claire 說:
I'm ok
Elsa 說:
Tell us the outlines in your paper
Claire 說:
abotion mental health
Claire 說:
abortion
蘇菲亞 說:
together
Claire 說:
My main outline includes abortion, and I would quote others to persuade others by using lot of science research and essay. The key words are the mental help, and psychology of abortion. Most information are English, because there are much more information what I want in the foreign website.
Claire 說:
These annotations information I use is Eclipse of Reason. Bernard N. Nathanson. Jan, 1985, The effects of abortion. Lisa Tolin. Psychology Today, Jul/Aug 97,
Abortion 'leaves mental legacy. 12 December 2005. BBC News,
, and Abortion and psychology. May 17, 2007. Washington Times
蘇菲亞 說:
mental help, and psychology of abortion.
蘇菲亞 說:
so you deal with the mental problem
Claire 說:
These annotations information I use is Eclipse of Reason. Bernard N. Nathanson. Jan, 1985, The effects of abortion. Lisa Tolin. Psychology Today, Jul/Aug 97,
Abortion 'leaves mental legacy. 12 December 2005. BBC News,
, and Abortion and psychology. May 17, 2007. Washington Times
Claire 說:
Yes
Claire 說:
psychology of abortion
Elsa 說:
So how did you deal with the other points of view such as woman's right?
Claire 說:
I choose to be pro-lifer.
Elsa 說:
How did you conquer the weak point?
Claire 說:
I use others' words
蘇菲亞 說:
or baby's right
Claire 說:
such as the Pope
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap
蘇菲亞 說:
baby's psychological problem
Claire 說:
It's psychological problem of women
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i agree with sophia
Claire 說:
Do you mean that I should develop baby's psychological problem?
Claire 說:
Then I can try.
蘇菲亞 說:
no
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
if you have enough time
Claire 說:
Ok
蘇菲亞 說:
because that's also elsa's problem
Claire 說:
Thanks
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
otherwise you must reorganize your issue paper
蘇菲亞 說:
both of you focus on the adults
蘇菲亞 說:
or don't point out the word "baby"
Elsa 說:
I see.
蘇菲亞 說:
otherwise you will have confrontation in your paper
Claire 說:
OK
蘇菲亞 說:
joyce
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
ok
Claire 說:
come to Joyce!!
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
The relationship between cosmetic surgery and the self-image
Why the trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is my topic(present)
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
Focus on three parts:
1. People are getting higher and higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
2. The media, the mass images of the beautiful celebrities, and the advertisements about the cosmetic surgery
3. The self-image, self-reflection and the social values
Social values affect the way we look ourselves.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so i make a deep discussion about these three topics
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
Search information in the key words
English > “self image” “plastic surgery”
Mostly in the website of the “All Business”
http://www.allbusiness.com/
Chinese> “整形文化” “自我形象” easy to get the full ideas and easy to understand
website全國碩博士論文資訊網
http://etds.ncl.edu.tw/theabs/index.html
Elsa 說:
I think that your standpoints are clear.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
thx
蘇菲亞 說:
but
蘇菲亞 說:
i don't know your viewpoints
蘇菲亞 說:
you support?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is just the outline
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
my ideas will be in the article
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i just categoly them
蘇菲亞 說:
just remind you
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i know that i will pay more attentio non this part
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
it is also my main problem thx for Sophia
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-image psychology
American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
Claire 說:
From TV! It's cool.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
every annotation stands for one point
蘇菲亞 說:
AND SALES
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so there are three stand points
蘇菲亞 說:
YOU FIND LOTS OF INFORMATION
Elsa 說:
Don't forget to express your views when you use them.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
are you praising me?
蘇菲亞 說:
IN THE CONCLUSION PART YOU MIGHT WANT TO ORGANIZE THEM AGAIN IN BRIEF WORDS
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
The higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
The higher standard about aesthetic
>contribute to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year
The pursuit of attractiveness and good identification are the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-imThis article puts much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives.
age psychology
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself The cultural surroundings which affected the social values people have to self-image and the appearance.
The massive images of the celebrities and advertisements
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Film clip
The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
every annatation stands for one point
Elsa 說:
Do you have problems when you use these information?
蘇菲亞 說:
for example the meaning
蘇菲亞 說:
or some conflict
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yes, at first i can't find any essay on the internet
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
after a long long stuggling, i found and useful website
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
that's the begining of my annatation
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
that's why i post my articles in the blogger so late
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so sophia has pointed out that
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I do quote some phrases in my paper but not much. Mostly I paraphrase the original articles and use my own words to explain.
蘇菲亞 說:
i think that you could qoate
to be more persuasive
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Elsa 說:
Using the words from convincing resouces will helpful
Claire 說:
That's right~
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap i agree with you
i will improve that
蘇菲亞 說:
SO ANY PROBLEMS?
DID YOU CHANGE YOUR POSITION
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I THINK NOT
I AGREE WITH THE POINTS
and i agree with the attitude toward cosmetic surgery
Elsa 說:
If there is no problems...
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is the end maybe
Research paper questions
3. Main points in each source that support your own argument/opinions.
Do you organize the relations in discourses with a smoth connection and transition between sentences?
Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
>>Yes, I do quote some phrases in my paper but not much. Mostly I paraphrase the original articles and use my own words to explain.
4. Revisions that you have made compared to annotations.
Do you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
Do you polish your language (e.g., verb tense, s-v agreement, word form, run-on, sentece structure, informal, etc)?
>>I have made some correction. I much more focus on the conjunction problems when I'm writing. Moreover, I pay more attention on my grammar problems.
5. Perspectives that you have added or changed compared to issue papers.
>>In fact, through the research of this topic, I really get lots of information which I never thought of before. It is really interesting that the cosmetic surgery has close relationship with many social surroundings. Not until you make the deep study of one issue do you realize the complicated and profound meanings of it. I think that cosmetic surgery is really an interesting topic to discuss.
6.What revisions have you made compared to your annotations?
What drives you to make revisions? Do you polish your language and pay attention to cohesion and coherence in your final paper?
>>I think that the comments from the classmates and the advice of teacher are the main reasons that drive me to revise the annotations. Compared to the former annotations, I find that the conjunctions problems have decreased a lot. After all, I pay much more attention to it.
7.What perspectives have you changed compared to your issue paper?
Did you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
>>I really add some of my peer's opinions.
Do you organize the relations in discourses with a smoth connection and transition between sentences?
Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
>>Yes, I do quote some phrases in my paper but not much. Mostly I paraphrase the original articles and use my own words to explain.
4. Revisions that you have made compared to annotations.
Do you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
Do you polish your language (e.g., verb tense, s-v agreement, word form, run-on, sentece structure, informal, etc)?
>>I have made some correction. I much more focus on the conjunction problems when I'm writing. Moreover, I pay more attention on my grammar problems.
5. Perspectives that you have added or changed compared to issue papers.
>>In fact, through the research of this topic, I really get lots of information which I never thought of before. It is really interesting that the cosmetic surgery has close relationship with many social surroundings. Not until you make the deep study of one issue do you realize the complicated and profound meanings of it. I think that cosmetic surgery is really an interesting topic to discuss.
6.What revisions have you made compared to your annotations?
What drives you to make revisions? Do you polish your language and pay attention to cohesion and coherence in your final paper?
>>I think that the comments from the classmates and the advice of teacher are the main reasons that drive me to revise the annotations. Compared to the former annotations, I find that the conjunctions problems have decreased a lot. After all, I pay much more attention to it.
7.What perspectives have you changed compared to your issue paper?
Did you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
>>I really add some of my peer's opinions.
Research Paper Presentation (questions)
This course takes a learner-centered process approach to writing. Peer response and revision is as important as the final product. The self-reflection task also addresses the dual audience of self and other.
The blog illuminates a writer's journey for the reader. You should manage and present various tasks and drafts in a clear way.
The textbook includes much information to train reader-judges. At this final stage of the course, please Review the main ideas that we cover in classes and look at the last chapter for editing skills, which would help you and your peers find major errors in logic and grammar.
To facilitate research paper presentation and sharing, please post your draft on blogs. Peer response should focus on the following questions.
1. Paper outlines with the title and 1-3 keywords (e.g., euthanasia, gay and lesbian marriage, animal rights, etc).
Do you search information using these keywords? In English or Chinese? Why?
Do the title and keywords forecast a convincing thesis or an attitude toward the subject?
2. Topics/themes in four annotations and their intended audiences (e.g., general, academic, customers, peers and friends, other).
Do the library and Web sources provide sound reasons and proper evidence?
Do you use shared contextual knowledge (e.g.,experiences, emotions, cultures) to support your argument and opinions?
3. Main points in each source that support your own argument/opinions.
Do you organize the relations in discourses with a smoth connection and transition between sentences?
Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
4. Revisions that you have made compared to annotations.
Do you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
Do you polish your language (e.g., verb tense, s-v agreement, word form, run-on, sentece structure, informal, etc)?
5. Perspectives that you have added or changed compared to issue papers.
Do you find weak reasoning and errors of logic (e.g., irrelevant, oversimplification, overgeneralization, false analogy, undefined terms, etc)?
Do you change your question or problem during the course of study?
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The blog illuminates a writer's journey for the reader. You should manage and present various tasks and drafts in a clear way.
The textbook includes much information to train reader-judges. At this final stage of the course, please Review the main ideas that we cover in classes and look at the last chapter for editing skills, which would help you and your peers find major errors in logic and grammar.
To facilitate research paper presentation and sharing, please post your draft on blogs. Peer response should focus on the following questions.
1. Paper outlines with the title and 1-3 keywords (e.g., euthanasia, gay and lesbian marriage, animal rights, etc).
Do you search information using these keywords? In English or Chinese? Why?
Do the title and keywords forecast a convincing thesis or an attitude toward the subject?
2. Topics/themes in four annotations and their intended audiences (e.g., general, academic, customers, peers and friends, other).
Do the library and Web sources provide sound reasons and proper evidence?
Do you use shared contextual knowledge (e.g.,experiences, emotions, cultures) to support your argument and opinions?
3. Main points in each source that support your own argument/opinions.
Do you organize the relations in discourses with a smoth connection and transition between sentences?
Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
4. Revisions that you have made compared to annotations.
Do you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
Do you polish your language (e.g., verb tense, s-v agreement, word form, run-on, sentece structure, informal, etc)?
5. Perspectives that you have added or changed compared to issue papers.
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Topic and theme in four annotations
2. 4 full citations//Topics/themes in four annotations and their intended audiences.
Four full citations
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
The higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
The higher standard about aesthetic
>contribute to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year
The pursuit of attractiveness and good identification are the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery
(the aspects of the first part)
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-image psychology
American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
This article puts much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives.
What are the standards of aesthetics? The self-image -the mental picture of what we think and look ourselves from our point of views
The public ideas and judgments we always identify with
(the aspects of the third part)
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
The cultural surroundings which affected the social values people have to self-image and the appearance.
The massive images of the celebrities and advertisements
(the aspects of the second part)
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
Film clip
The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
Beauty really does matter but not all
But like our looks and accept the way we are born with.
Four full citations
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
The higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
The higher standard about aesthetic
>contribute to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year
The pursuit of attractiveness and good identification are the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery
(the aspects of the first part)
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-image psychology
American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
This article puts much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives.
What are the standards of aesthetics? The self-image -the mental picture of what we think and look ourselves from our point of views
The public ideas and judgments we always identify with
(the aspects of the third part)
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
The cultural surroundings which affected the social values people have to self-image and the appearance.
The massive images of the celebrities and advertisements
(the aspects of the second part)
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
Film clip
The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
Beauty really does matter but not all
But like our looks and accept the way we are born with.
Paper outline
1.Paper outlines including the title and 1-3 keywords Do you search information using these keywords? In English or Chinese? Why?
Paper outline
The relationship between cosmetic surgery and the self-image
Why the trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world?
Focus on three parts:
1. People are getting higher and higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
2. The media, the mass images of the beautiful celebrities, and the advertisements about the cosmetic surgery
3. The self-image, self-reflection and the social values
Social values affect the way we look ourselves.
Search information in the key words
English > “self image” “plastic surgery”
Mostly in the website of the “All Business”
http://www.allbusiness.com/
Chinese> “整形文化” “自我形象” easy to get the full ideas and easy to understand
website全國碩博士論文資訊網
http://etds.ncl.edu.tw/theabs/index.html
Paper outline
The relationship between cosmetic surgery and the self-image
Why the trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world?
Focus on three parts:
1. People are getting higher and higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
2. The media, the mass images of the beautiful celebrities, and the advertisements about the cosmetic surgery
3. The self-image, self-reflection and the social values
Social values affect the way we look ourselves.
Search information in the key words
English > “self image” “plastic surgery”
Mostly in the website of the “All Business”
http://www.allbusiness.com/
Chinese> “整形文化” “自我形象” easy to get the full ideas and easy to understand
website全國碩博士論文資訊網
http://etds.ncl.edu.tw/theabs/index.html
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