陳霈絃(961002009, Joyce Chen)
Professor Liang
English Composition 2A
Jan. 10, 2009
Cosmetic surgery, the emerging culture and its relationship with social surroundings?
The trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world and become prosperous recently. It’s not difficult to find that our lives are gradually overwhelmed by the massive images and the commercial advertisement about the reports of cosmetic surgeries. However, how the cosmetic surgery tends to be a social phenomenon? Actually, under the influence of the intense media’s power and the change of the social values toward the aesthetic, the idea of the plastic surgery is much more acceptable and popular than before.
Generally, modern people are more conscious of the images they present in front of the public. In fact, the judgments and impressions from others mostly play the key factors which affect the way people survey themselves. Therefore, we care what other people look us and are easily affected by the majority’s opinions which dominate the orientation of the social values. That is to say, the public attitudes toward the aesthetic, however, become the standards we fit to ourselves.
In the modern times, people have more high standards about their outer beauty. Due to the importance of the beauty has been highlighted in this modern time; the pursuit of the good look gradually becomes the trend that people are crazy about. Thanks to the advancement of the technology, the cosmetic surgery becomes the popular way that offers people the chance to improve their outside appearance to be more attractive. Having a more appealing look indeed strengthens one people’s confidence and besides satisfies people’s self-appraisal. Therefore, this kind of change can explains why the cosmetic surgery becomes the emerging culture in the modern times.
Actually, under the influences of the intense media’s power and the change of social values toward the aesthetic, the plastic surgery is no longer an ordinary surgical operation. The motive for the plastic surgery has transferred from the simple reconstruction of the innate defects to the pursuit of the perfect and gorgeous looks. This kind of transformation of cosmetic surgery to some extent reflects not only the change of the social values toward aesthetic and people’s attitude toward this technology.
Over the years, the primary motive of doing cosmetic surgery is to improve people’s appearances to be more attractive. In fact, the standards of aesthetics which dominate our way of looking ourselves have the relationship with the power of self-image. In fact, the inner version of how one person looks himself accounts for some elements we survey the values of ourselves. This inner version can be called self-image. Self image is the mental picture of what we think and look ourselves from our point of views. It’s just like a mirror which reflects the way we present out and gives us the reference to conform with. In the daily lives we may be unconsciously influenced by the images which creepily stores in our minds which called self-schema. The schema is the construction of our images dominates the private sides of our minds.
In truth, the good self-image has relation with the development of one person’s mental attitudes which might indirectly lead to different out looks on his lives. One of the articles published in the journal of American Salesman called power of self-image psychology, putting much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives. In fact, the power of self-image to some extent influences the thoughts of people in an indirect way. For instance, this article concerns that having a good self-image is one of the key elements of having a more positives life. Thus those who have greater self-images are more confident of presenting in front of the public and sometimes are more willing to take risks. It means that those who are more optimistic about lives have more opportunities of being successful than those who have poor self-images.
The text apparently supports the ideas of how great impact self-image make on human beings. In fact, people are more conscious of the importance of the self-image and know well the benefits and advantages they could receive from a better self-image. Therefore, people are trying hard to find ways to improve their appearances. Being attractive builds up a greater self-image and thus enhances the confidence people have toward their lives.
One of the series of the TV program in America has also discussed about the issue of the self-image. The topic of the clip Image and self image mainly focused on how to do with self-esteem and its relationship to our feeling about how we look-our general appearances. The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
Undoubtedly the self- image really has influence on the way we survey ourselves and the attitude we have toward lives. However, the standards of how we survey ourselves sometimes not only have relationship with self-image but also under the influences of the social values mostly. The public ideas and judgments sometimes are the standards which we always identify with. As I mention before, people are getting more consciousness that the pursuit of the better appearance is much more valued than before. Thus, the images we present in front of the others are important and sometimes are the impressions we leave to the public. To leave a good impression on the others, a better appearance is definitely under the consideration. This phenomenon gradually dominates the social values. We can find that in the modern society, the physical perfection one person pursuits of is basically built up under the high standards of the appearance.
Besides the factors discussed above, the intense media’s power and the cultural surroundings also play the important factors which affected the social values people have about self-image and the appearance; moreover, encouraging people to do cosmetic surgery. Over the years, our lives are overwhelmed by the great deal of the advertisement about the cosmetic surgery which highlights the magic effectiveness of the surgery. Moreover, by means of the prosperous media tools such as the magazine, newspaper, and the internet, people are much easily to receive the news and the massive images of the celebrities and famous idols. Actually, people maybe gradually influenced by these images and the ideas they publicize. The beauty and the fabulous features of those famous celebrities and idols are the patterns we would like to imitate. It seems that beauty has been highlighted and been viewed as the important factor in competing with others.
Indeed, the idea of cosmetic surgery is widespread in this modern time. In the article publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly Surgeons Enhance Patients’ Self-image points out the overall phenomenon of the cosmetic surgery. “If you do opt for a cosmetic procedure, you will join more than 10 million of your fellow Americans who had such procedures in 2005. This number represents an increase of 11 percent over the previous years and a startling 38 percent increase since 2000.” This study gives us the approximate number of the Americans who are taking the surgery. The uprising numbers show that more and more people are choosing plastic surgery as the way to improve their appearances. In the early time when cosmetic surgery is not so popular and acceptable, the only way to make oneself look more beautiful is by cosmetics. It is not difficult to find that most brands of cosmetic products claim the remarkable effectiveness after use, which appeals lots of beauty-pursuers to try.
However, as people have much higher standards about aesthetic, the make-up products are no longer sufficient for those who want to pursue the quicker way of becoming attractive once and for all. Instead, they are more apt to think of the cosmetics as the way to change their appearances which they have seldom thought of before. Therefore, this phenomenon indirectly contributes to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year. The popularity of the cosmetic surgery however represents a kind of new trend and new ideas of this modern time.
Although the pursuit of attractiveness and good identification may be the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery, it doesn’t mean that those who take surgery are superficial. Actually, pursuing the beauty thing is a kind of human nature which is difficult to be eliminated. Having a good look is the dream of everybody’s. We all have desires to see the beautiful image of ourselves in the mirror. By doing the cosmetic surgery, we could attain what we can not attain before. The happiness and confidence which come from the satisfaction of having good-looking are exactly the human nature of making ourselves pleased.
The cosmetic surgery not only improves one person’s appearance but also enhances the confidence of one person. That’s why more and more people choose this way in order to make a big change. In this beauty- dominated society, we must indeed try hard to find the way to make ourselves look better and attractive. The host of one of the American TV series also agrees that beauty really does matter. In fact, we are living in an ideal world that we would just accept for the way that we are completely unnatural. Therefore, we don’t need to lie to ourselves that the first impression people have of us doesn’t matter at all.
Moreover, most people have consciousness that the first impression we leave in other people’s mind is really important. It is a realistic world which beauty and material enjoyment dominated all. The way we look and present decide what kind of person we are, and sometimes we would be labeled by the comments people give to us. Therefore, in order to be the focus of the attention and leave a good impression in the public, a better appearance is definitely significant and necessary.
However, the host is not telling us that a better appearance triumphs all. She is not persuading people to pursue the ultimate beauty or magnifying the importance of appearance. Instead, we should be at least conscious of some basis when presenting out in front of the public. First, the general cleanness and the smiles are the basic principles we should learn. The freshness and cleanness of a person would be the bonuses and may leave a good impression on people. Second, an appropriate dressing is also significant. It doesn’t mean that the glamorous clothes are the best choices. Instead, the clothes should complement your body shape and balance in harmony. Moreover, a good dressing can show you personal style and personality, but be care that- don’t over do it. And don’t fall into the fashion victims.
Undoubtedly, the pursuit of the beauty is a kind of natural instincts. In addition, having a gorgeous look as the famous stars is the dream of everybody. However, the appearance of a person is born with that we can not change. Nevertheless, the medical technology of cosmetic surgery becomes the way people could improve their looks they expect to have. That’s why the cosmetic surgery becomes the trend that people catch up with.
As a matter of fact, people indeed have the right to be attractive and pursue beautiful looks. However, the most important thing is that we should like our looks and accept the way we are born with. The cosmetic surgery indeed provides us the convenient method of making ourselves look better.
No matter one person takes the cosmetic surgery for the aesthetics reasons or for the construction of the innate defects; we should respect his choice and offer some appropriate advice to help him not to over pursue the beauty. Diane Gerber, the author of the book 100 Questions and Answers about Plastic Surgery says that “You should be able to clearly define your desire to improve aging or to enhance facial or body appearance. Others may support you in your decision, but the decision to have plastic surgery should be yours alone."
The cosmetic surgery really tends to be an emerging culture in these recent years. Apparently, from the above study of the relationship between the cosmetic surgery and the social surroundings, we can find that the self-reflection, the social values about the aesthetics and the popularization of the media all influence and change people’s attitudes toward the cosmetic surgery. The higher acceptance of this new medical surgery represents a kind of revolution of the traditional attitude toward cosmetic surgery. Definitely, this technologic surgery really provides modern people with a convenient and quick way of changing the appearance and even the attitude toward life.
References
Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Surgeons Enhance Patients’ Self-Image. Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
Diane Gerber,& Marie Czenko Kuechel(2005). 100 Questions and Answers About Plastic Surgery.
Self-Image.From Wikipedia: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Self_image
2009年1月10日 星期六
Final Paper Draft
陳霈絃(961002009, Joyce Chen)
Professor Liang
English Composition 2A
Jan. 10, 2009
Cosmetic surgery, the emerging culture and its relationship with social surroundings.
The trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world and become prosperous recently. It’s not difficult to find that our lives are gradually overwhelmed by the massive images and the commercial advertisement about the reports of cosmetic surgeries. However, how the cosmetic surgery tends to be a social phenomenon? Actually, under the influence of the intense media’s power and the change of the social values toward the aesthetic, the idea of the plastic surgery is much more acceptable and popular than before.
Generally, modern people are more conscious of the images they present in front of the public. In fact, the judgments and impressions from others mostly play the key factors which affect the way people survey themselves. Therefore, we care what other people look us and are easily affected by the majority’s opinions which dominate the orientation of the social values. That is to say, the public attitudes toward the aesthetic, however, become the standards we fit to ourselves.
In the modern times, people have more high standards about their outer beauty. Due to the importance of the beauty has been highlighted in this modern time; the pursuit of the good look gradually becomes the trend that people are crazy about. Thanks to the advancement of the technology, the cosmetic surgery becomes the popular way that offers people the chance to improve their outside appearance to be more attractive. Having a more appealing look indeed strengthens one people’s confidence and besides satisfies people’s self-appraisal. Therefore, this kind of change can explains why the cosmetic surgery becomes the emerging culture in the modern times.
Actually, under the influences of the intense media’s power and the change of social values toward the aesthetic, the plastic surgery is no longer an ordinary surgical operation. The motive for the plastic surgery has transferred from the simple reconstruction of the innate defects to the pursuit of the perfect and gorgeous looks. This kind of transformation of cosmetic surgery to some extent reflects not only the change of the social values toward aesthetic and people’s attitude toward this technology.
Over the years, the primary motive of doing cosmetic surgery is to improve people’s appearances to be more attractive. In fact, the standards of aesthetics which dominate our way of looking ourselves have the relationship with the power of self-image. In fact, the inner version of how one person looks himself accounts for some elements we survey the values of ourselves. This inner version can be called self-image. Self image is the mental picture of what we think and look ourselves from our point of views. It’s just like a mirror which reflects the way we present out and gives us the reference to conform with. In the daily lives we may be unconsciously influenced by the images which creepily stores in our minds which called self-schema. The schema is the construction of our images dominates the private sides of our minds.
In truth, the good self-image has relation with the development of one person’s mental attitudes which might indirectly lead to different out looks on his lives. One of the articles published in the journal of American Salesman called power of self-image psychology, putting much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives. In fact, the power of self-image to some extent influences the thoughts of people in an indirect way. For instance, this article concerns that having a good self-image is one of the key elements of having a more positives life. Thus those who have greater self-images are more confident of presenting in front of the public and sometimes are more willing to take risks. It means that those who are more optimistic about lives have more opportunities of being successful than those who have poor self-images.
The text apparently supports the ideas of how great impact self-image make on human beings. In fact, people are more conscious of the importance of the self-image and know well the benefits and advantages they could receive from a better self-image. Therefore, people are trying hard to find ways to improve their appearances. Being attractive builds up a greater self-image and thus enhances the confidence people have toward their lives.
One of the series of the TV program in America has also discussed about the issue of the self-image. The topic of the clip Image and self image mainly focused on how to do with self-esteem and its relationship to our feeling about how we look-our general appearances. The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
Undoubtedly the self- image really has influence on the way we survey ourselves and the attitude we have toward lives. However, the standards of how we survey ourselves sometimes not only have relationship with self-image but also under the influences of the social values mostly. The public ideas and judgments sometimes are the standards which we always identify with. As I mention before, people are getting more consciousness that the pursuit of the better appearance is much more valued than before. Thus, the images we present in front of the others are important and sometimes are the impressions we leave to the public. To leave a good impression on the others, a better appearance is definitely under the consideration. This phenomenon gradually dominates the social values. We can find that in the modern society, the physical perfection one person pursuits of is basically built up under the high standards of the appearance.
Besides the relationship, the intense media’s power and the cultural surroundings also play the important factors which affected the social values people have about self-image and the appearance. Over the years, our lives are overwhelmed by the great deal of the advertisement about the cosmetic surgery which highlights the magic effectiveness of the surgery. Moreover, by means of the prosperous media tools such as the magazine, newspaper, and the internet, people are much easily to receive the news and the massive images of the celebrities and famous idols. Actually, people maybe gradually influenced by these images and the ideas they publicize. The beauty and the fabulous features of those famous celebrities and idols are the patterns we would like to imitate. It seems that beauty has been highlighted and been viewed as the important factor in competing with others.
Indeed, the idea of cosmetic surgery is widespread in this modern time. In the article publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly Surgeons Enhance Patients’ Self-image points out the overall phenomenon of the cosmetic surgery. “If you do opt for a cosmetic procedure, you will join more than 10 million of your fellow Americans who had such procedures in 2005. This number represents an increase of 11 percent over the previous years and a startling 38 percent increase since 2000.” This study gives us the approximate number of the Americans who are taking the surgery. The uprising numbers show that more and more people are choosing plastic surgery as the way to improve their appearances. In the early time when cosmetic surgery is not so popular and acceptable, the only way to make oneself look more beautiful is by cosmetics. It is not difficult to find that most brands of cosmetic products claim the remarkable effectiveness after use, which appeals lots of beauty-pursuers to try.
However, as people have much higher standards about aesthetic, the make-up products are no longer sufficient for those who want to pursue the quicker way of becoming attractive once and for all. Instead, they are more apt to think of the cosmetics as the way to change their appearances which they have seldom thought of before. Therefore, this phenomenon indirectly contributes to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year. The popularity of the cosmetic surgery however represents a kind of new trend and new ideas of this modern time.
Although the pursuit of attractiveness and good identification may be the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery, it doesn’t mean that those who take surgery are superficial. Actually, pursuing the beauty thing is a kind of human nature which is difficult to be eliminated. Having a good look is the dream of everybody’s. We all have desires to see the beautiful image of ourselves in the mirror. By doing the cosmetic surgery, we could attain what we can not attain before. The happiness and confidence which come from the satisfaction of having good-looking are exactly the human nature of making ourselves pleased.
The cosmetic surgery not only improves one person’s appearance but also enhances the confidence of one person. That’s why more and more people choose this way in order to make a big change. In this beauty- dominated society, we must indeed try hard to find the way to make ourselves look better and attractive. The host of one of the American TV series also agrees that beauty really does matter. In fact, we are living in an ideal world that we would just accept for the way that we are completely unnatural. Therefore, we don’t need to lie to ourselves that the first impression people have of us doesn’t matter at all.
Moreover, most people have consciousness that the first impression we leave in other people’s mind is really important. It is a realistic world which beauty and material enjoyment dominated all. The way we look and present decide what kind of person we are, and sometimes we would be labeled by the comments people give to us. Therefore, in order to be the focus of the attention and leave a good impression in the public, a better appearance is definitely significant and necessary.
However, the host is not telling us that a better appearance triumphs all. She is not persuading people to pursue the ultimate beauty or magnifying the importance of appearance. Instead, we should be at least conscious of some basis when presenting out in front of the public. First, the general cleanness and the smiles are the basic principles we should learn. The freshness and cleanness of a person would be the bonuses and may leave a good impression on people. Second, an appropriate dressing is also significant. It doesn’t mean that the glamorous clothes are the best choices. Instead, the clothes should complement your body shape and balance in harmony. Moreover, a good dressing can show you personal style and personality, but be care that- don’t over do it. And don’t fall into the fashion victims.
Undoubtedly, the pursuit of the beauty is a kind of natural instincts. In addition, having a gorgeous look as the famous stars is the dream of everybody. However, the appearance of a person is born with that we can not change. Nevertheless, the medical technology of cosmetic surgery becomes the way people could improve their looks they expect to have. That’s why the cosmetic surgery becomes the trend that people catch up with.
As a matter of fact, people indeed have the right to be attractive and pursue beautiful looks. However, the most important thing is that we should like our looks and accept the way we are born with. The cosmetic surgery indeed provides us the convenient method of making ourselves look better.
No matter one person takes the cosmetic surgery for the aesthetics reasons or for the construction of the innate defects; we should respect his choice and offer some appropriate advice to help him not to over pursue the beauty. Diane Gerber, the author of the book 100 Questions and Answers about Plastic Surgery says that “You should be able to clearly define your desire to improve aging or to enhance facial or body appearance. Others may support you in your decision, but the decision to have plastic surgery should be yours alone."
The cosmetic surgery really tends to be an emerging culture in these recent years. Apparently, from the above study of the relationship between the cosmetic surgery and the social surroundings, we can find that the self-reflection, the social values about the aesthetics and the popularization of the media all influence and change people’s attitudes toward the cosmetic surgery. The higher acceptance of this new medical surgery represents a kind of revolution of the traditional attitude toward cosmetic surgery. Definitely, this technologic surgery really provides modern people with a convenient and quick way of changing the appearance and even the attitude toward life.
References
Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Surgeons Enhance Patients’ Self-Image. Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
Diane Gerber,& Marie Czenko Kuechel(2005). 100 Questions and Answers About Plastic Surgery.
“Self-Image” In Wikipedia Encyclopedia. From http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Self_image
Professor Liang
English Composition 2A
Jan. 10, 2009
Cosmetic surgery, the emerging culture and its relationship with social surroundings.
The trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world and become prosperous recently. It’s not difficult to find that our lives are gradually overwhelmed by the massive images and the commercial advertisement about the reports of cosmetic surgeries. However, how the cosmetic surgery tends to be a social phenomenon? Actually, under the influence of the intense media’s power and the change of the social values toward the aesthetic, the idea of the plastic surgery is much more acceptable and popular than before.
Generally, modern people are more conscious of the images they present in front of the public. In fact, the judgments and impressions from others mostly play the key factors which affect the way people survey themselves. Therefore, we care what other people look us and are easily affected by the majority’s opinions which dominate the orientation of the social values. That is to say, the public attitudes toward the aesthetic, however, become the standards we fit to ourselves.
In the modern times, people have more high standards about their outer beauty. Due to the importance of the beauty has been highlighted in this modern time; the pursuit of the good look gradually becomes the trend that people are crazy about. Thanks to the advancement of the technology, the cosmetic surgery becomes the popular way that offers people the chance to improve their outside appearance to be more attractive. Having a more appealing look indeed strengthens one people’s confidence and besides satisfies people’s self-appraisal. Therefore, this kind of change can explains why the cosmetic surgery becomes the emerging culture in the modern times.
Actually, under the influences of the intense media’s power and the change of social values toward the aesthetic, the plastic surgery is no longer an ordinary surgical operation. The motive for the plastic surgery has transferred from the simple reconstruction of the innate defects to the pursuit of the perfect and gorgeous looks. This kind of transformation of cosmetic surgery to some extent reflects not only the change of the social values toward aesthetic and people’s attitude toward this technology.
Over the years, the primary motive of doing cosmetic surgery is to improve people’s appearances to be more attractive. In fact, the standards of aesthetics which dominate our way of looking ourselves have the relationship with the power of self-image. In fact, the inner version of how one person looks himself accounts for some elements we survey the values of ourselves. This inner version can be called self-image. Self image is the mental picture of what we think and look ourselves from our point of views. It’s just like a mirror which reflects the way we present out and gives us the reference to conform with. In the daily lives we may be unconsciously influenced by the images which creepily stores in our minds which called self-schema. The schema is the construction of our images dominates the private sides of our minds.
In truth, the good self-image has relation with the development of one person’s mental attitudes which might indirectly lead to different out looks on his lives. One of the articles published in the journal of American Salesman called power of self-image psychology, putting much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives. In fact, the power of self-image to some extent influences the thoughts of people in an indirect way. For instance, this article concerns that having a good self-image is one of the key elements of having a more positives life. Thus those who have greater self-images are more confident of presenting in front of the public and sometimes are more willing to take risks. It means that those who are more optimistic about lives have more opportunities of being successful than those who have poor self-images.
The text apparently supports the ideas of how great impact self-image make on human beings. In fact, people are more conscious of the importance of the self-image and know well the benefits and advantages they could receive from a better self-image. Therefore, people are trying hard to find ways to improve their appearances. Being attractive builds up a greater self-image and thus enhances the confidence people have toward their lives.
One of the series of the TV program in America has also discussed about the issue of the self-image. The topic of the clip Image and self image mainly focused on how to do with self-esteem and its relationship to our feeling about how we look-our general appearances. The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
Undoubtedly the self- image really has influence on the way we survey ourselves and the attitude we have toward lives. However, the standards of how we survey ourselves sometimes not only have relationship with self-image but also under the influences of the social values mostly. The public ideas and judgments sometimes are the standards which we always identify with. As I mention before, people are getting more consciousness that the pursuit of the better appearance is much more valued than before. Thus, the images we present in front of the others are important and sometimes are the impressions we leave to the public. To leave a good impression on the others, a better appearance is definitely under the consideration. This phenomenon gradually dominates the social values. We can find that in the modern society, the physical perfection one person pursuits of is basically built up under the high standards of the appearance.
Besides the relationship, the intense media’s power and the cultural surroundings also play the important factors which affected the social values people have about self-image and the appearance. Over the years, our lives are overwhelmed by the great deal of the advertisement about the cosmetic surgery which highlights the magic effectiveness of the surgery. Moreover, by means of the prosperous media tools such as the magazine, newspaper, and the internet, people are much easily to receive the news and the massive images of the celebrities and famous idols. Actually, people maybe gradually influenced by these images and the ideas they publicize. The beauty and the fabulous features of those famous celebrities and idols are the patterns we would like to imitate. It seems that beauty has been highlighted and been viewed as the important factor in competing with others.
Indeed, the idea of cosmetic surgery is widespread in this modern time. In the article publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly Surgeons Enhance Patients’ Self-image points out the overall phenomenon of the cosmetic surgery. “If you do opt for a cosmetic procedure, you will join more than 10 million of your fellow Americans who had such procedures in 2005. This number represents an increase of 11 percent over the previous years and a startling 38 percent increase since 2000.” This study gives us the approximate number of the Americans who are taking the surgery. The uprising numbers show that more and more people are choosing plastic surgery as the way to improve their appearances. In the early time when cosmetic surgery is not so popular and acceptable, the only way to make oneself look more beautiful is by cosmetics. It is not difficult to find that most brands of cosmetic products claim the remarkable effectiveness after use, which appeals lots of beauty-pursuers to try.
However, as people have much higher standards about aesthetic, the make-up products are no longer sufficient for those who want to pursue the quicker way of becoming attractive once and for all. Instead, they are more apt to think of the cosmetics as the way to change their appearances which they have seldom thought of before. Therefore, this phenomenon indirectly contributes to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year. The popularity of the cosmetic surgery however represents a kind of new trend and new ideas of this modern time.
Although the pursuit of attractiveness and good identification may be the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery, it doesn’t mean that those who take surgery are superficial. Actually, pursuing the beauty thing is a kind of human nature which is difficult to be eliminated. Having a good look is the dream of everybody’s. We all have desires to see the beautiful image of ourselves in the mirror. By doing the cosmetic surgery, we could attain what we can not attain before. The happiness and confidence which come from the satisfaction of having good-looking are exactly the human nature of making ourselves pleased.
The cosmetic surgery not only improves one person’s appearance but also enhances the confidence of one person. That’s why more and more people choose this way in order to make a big change. In this beauty- dominated society, we must indeed try hard to find the way to make ourselves look better and attractive. The host of one of the American TV series also agrees that beauty really does matter. In fact, we are living in an ideal world that we would just accept for the way that we are completely unnatural. Therefore, we don’t need to lie to ourselves that the first impression people have of us doesn’t matter at all.
Moreover, most people have consciousness that the first impression we leave in other people’s mind is really important. It is a realistic world which beauty and material enjoyment dominated all. The way we look and present decide what kind of person we are, and sometimes we would be labeled by the comments people give to us. Therefore, in order to be the focus of the attention and leave a good impression in the public, a better appearance is definitely significant and necessary.
However, the host is not telling us that a better appearance triumphs all. She is not persuading people to pursue the ultimate beauty or magnifying the importance of appearance. Instead, we should be at least conscious of some basis when presenting out in front of the public. First, the general cleanness and the smiles are the basic principles we should learn. The freshness and cleanness of a person would be the bonuses and may leave a good impression on people. Second, an appropriate dressing is also significant. It doesn’t mean that the glamorous clothes are the best choices. Instead, the clothes should complement your body shape and balance in harmony. Moreover, a good dressing can show you personal style and personality, but be care that- don’t over do it. And don’t fall into the fashion victims.
Undoubtedly, the pursuit of the beauty is a kind of natural instincts. In addition, having a gorgeous look as the famous stars is the dream of everybody. However, the appearance of a person is born with that we can not change. Nevertheless, the medical technology of cosmetic surgery becomes the way people could improve their looks they expect to have. That’s why the cosmetic surgery becomes the trend that people catch up with.
As a matter of fact, people indeed have the right to be attractive and pursue beautiful looks. However, the most important thing is that we should like our looks and accept the way we are born with. The cosmetic surgery indeed provides us the convenient method of making ourselves look better.
No matter one person takes the cosmetic surgery for the aesthetics reasons or for the construction of the innate defects; we should respect his choice and offer some appropriate advice to help him not to over pursue the beauty. Diane Gerber, the author of the book 100 Questions and Answers about Plastic Surgery says that “You should be able to clearly define your desire to improve aging or to enhance facial or body appearance. Others may support you in your decision, but the decision to have plastic surgery should be yours alone."
The cosmetic surgery really tends to be an emerging culture in these recent years. Apparently, from the above study of the relationship between the cosmetic surgery and the social surroundings, we can find that the self-reflection, the social values about the aesthetics and the popularization of the media all influence and change people’s attitudes toward the cosmetic surgery. The higher acceptance of this new medical surgery represents a kind of revolution of the traditional attitude toward cosmetic surgery. Definitely, this technologic surgery really provides modern people with a convenient and quick way of changing the appearance and even the attitude toward life.
References
Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Surgeons Enhance Patients’ Self-Image. Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
Diane Gerber,& Marie Czenko Kuechel(2005). 100 Questions and Answers About Plastic Surgery.
“Self-Image” In Wikipedia Encyclopedia. From http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Self_image
2009年1月8日 星期四
Msn peer discussion 3 - Research Question
蘇菲亞 說:
1. Paper outlines including the title and 1-3 keywords (e.g., euthanasia, gay and lesbian marriage, animal rights, etc). Do you search information using these keywords? In English or Chinese? Why?
Title: Could Gay be Gay?
Key words: Gay
I do research information through this keyword in both English and Chinese because I think that I could gather more information on the topic by doing so.
蘇菲亞 說:
However, I found mostly English version.
Elsa 說:
You just use a key word "Gay"?
蘇菲亞 說:
Yes
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and then you could find many articles
蘇菲亞 說:
now that it is a broad topic it is easy to find information.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so great and convenient
Elsa 說:
Then, you must be tired to find the information you want. Because there are too many information
Claire 說:
Both English and Chinese?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and maybe you can narrow your key words
蘇菲亞 說:
But I ONLY USE ONE WORD
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so the information you find may to be too broad for you
Elsa 說:
That's ok. If you can find the source you want.
Claire 說:
There must have lots of article
Elsa 說:
But you might spend more time.
蘇菲亞 說:
So what do you think I shoul;ld type?
Claire 說:
So you do the topic in extensive way?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the topic you choose may to broad for you
蘇菲亞 說:
SO WHAT SHOULD I DO
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
you can try to key in the keywords longer and explain detailly about your subject
Elsa 說:
It depends on what aspects you want to discuss.
Claire 說:
To narrow down the certain point of gay
蘇菲亞 說:
OK
蘇菲亞 說:
( 1 )
Ideology- Queer Cinema.
Louis Giannetti (1997). Understanding Movies, the eleventh edition, p.483-p.489. New jersey.
Intended audiences: Those who are interested in analyzing movies.
I think that it is quite interesting for it explain the ideology on homosexuality by analyzing the movies through media that we are familiar with.
蘇菲亞 說:
This is my citation
蘇菲亞 說:
The answer to the second question
蘇菲亞 說:
( 2 )
Gay Genes, Revisited.
LeVay, Tim; Hamer. Scientific American(1994, May), Vol. 270 Issue 5, p44, 6p Abstract: Two pieces of evidence, a structure within the human brain and a genetic link, point to a biological component for male homosexuality [ABSTRACT FROM PUBLISHER] (AN 14327844)
Intended audiences: Academic paper.
蘇菲亞 說:
The author gave out some results of the experiments and tries to convince the readers his point of view.
Difficulties: Some of the concepts in the articles are expressed in the scientific way. Thus, I may feel confused.
蘇菲亞 說:
Do Gays Have a Choice?
Epstein, Robert. Scientific American Mind, Feb/Mar2006, Vol. 17 Issue 1, p50, 8p Abstract: Science offers a clear and surprising answer to a controversial question [ABSTRACT FROM AUTHOR] (AN 23432303)
From http://web.ebscohost.com/ehost/pdf?vid=3&hid=3&sid=0ef80f05-7ac0-4011-a81c-1967ab28d5c1%40sessionmgr9
Intended audiences: Academic paper.
蘇菲亞 說:
The author stated different factors in the article that explain the cause of the sexual tendency. He did make his idea clear.
蘇菲亞 說:
( 4 )
Anonymous (September 7, 2004). Taiwan.
Web Site: http://www.jamessteed.com/gayson/gayson.htm
Intended audiences: General people. The web site contained the explanation of homosexuality so that people may get more information on the topic. By knowing more information, we might have less discrimination among them.
蘇菲亞 說:
( 5 )
Could Gay be Gay?
Anonymous
Web Site: http://www.youtube.com/v/V1iEpBsNIBU&hl=zh_TW&fs=1
Intended audiences: General people. Through the explanation on the topic, most of people could get to know more about gays/ lesbians ( their thoughts for example).
蘇菲亞 說:
That's all to the second question.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the first citation :i think it is great that you use the book we have studied in this semester as your reference
蘇菲亞 說:
The fact is you have to attack me
Claire 說:
Ideology!!!Interesting!(When night is falling )
蘇菲亞 說:
I don't know whether I had do the citation properly.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the idea is great
蘇菲亞 說:
BUT
Elsa 說:
How do you use the second reference in your final paper? Since you said you are confused about that.
蘇菲亞 說:
OH YEAH
蘇菲亞 說:
I mean some of the idea it mentioned in the article.
蘇菲亞 說:
Thanks
Claire 說:
Because it's a academic paper ?
蘇菲亞 說:
I WOULD REVISE THE SENTENSE
蘇菲亞 說:
Yes
Elsa 說:
You can add that if you agree with the standpoints in the sources.
Claire 說:
Are there lot of new terms should be explained?
蘇菲亞 說:
No.
蘇菲亞 說:
It's not the term but the words it used in the articles.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so you creat th eterm by tourself?
Claire 說:
So how do you overcpme the problem?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
sorry foe misspelling
蘇菲亞 說:
3. How do you use these sources to support your own argument/opinions or as references for facts? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
I do quote some words, and sentences in my final paper because they supported my opinion.
蘇菲亞 說:
4. What revisions have you made compared to your annotations? What drives you to make revisions? Do you polish your language and pay attention to cohesion and coherence in your final paper?
I made some revisions by referring to the comments I received from peer working.
蘇菲亞 說:
5. What perspectives have you changed compared to your issue paper? Did you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
I did add my peer’s opinion in my issue paper because they pointed out the shortcomings that I did not realize before.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so do you paraphrase the qoutes
蘇菲亞 說:
Before i want to change my position and focus on the cutural environment
蘇菲亞 說:
but i found out that all of the infromation that i have found was about the scientific problems
蘇菲亞 說:
yes i do qoute
Elsa 說:
So you need to find more evidence instead of the scientific problems
Claire 說:
What words do you quote?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the most important thing is you need to paraphrase them in your own ideas
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
did you do that?(attacking)
蘇菲亞 說:
(i can feel that
蘇菲亞 說:
it's hard to say it over here
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i know that you have paraphrased them
蘇菲亞 說:
i had put the quotation mark in my paragraph
蘇菲亞 說:
actually i quote
蘇菲亞 說:
and also paraphrased
Claire 說:
Do you have coherence between the paragraph?
Elsa 說:
Some conjunctions
蘇菲亞 說:
I...am not sure about that
蘇菲亞 說:
i think i did....吧
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
do make the mistake as same as me
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
don't
Elsa 說:
Well. You can do it better when you looking your sentence again.
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
Claire 說:
Check it again!
蘇菲亞 說:
so is that all?
蘇菲亞 說:
OK!
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
when i read your annatation, i find that overally there are not some serious problems in your article
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the grammar and spelling is ok
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the coherence is not too bad
Elsa 說:
You did a good job.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
but you stll have to polish them into a btter one
Claire 說:
serious problems?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
better
Claire 說:
So?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the conjuntions
Elsa 說:
conjunctions
Claire 說:
OH! OK
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so the next parts?
Elsa 說:
I can start to present
Claire 說:
OK
Claire 說:
Abortion!
Elsa 說:
Abortion: A Serious Challenge between Morality and Women’s right
Elsa 說:
key words:abortion, women's human rights
Elsa 說:
I search the information on internet database with these words in English way. Because I want to know more about the cases and the world trend of abortion. By using the keywords, I do find many information and some of them support to my opinion.
Elsa 說:
1. Women's consideration (Reasons for abortion)
2. Human rights (Research about the abortion laws)
3. Looking from another standpoints ( the thoughts of those who anti-abortion)
Elsa 說:
That's the outlines of my paper.
Elsa 說:
2. Topics/themes in four annotations and their intended audiences
Elsa 說:
1) The first annotation is videos about the opinions of Obama, the president-elect in America. He thinks that limit the liberty of abortion may harm women's human right.
Audience:
People who care about the relationship between abortion and government.
Claire 說:
So you emphasize women's human rights?
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Elsa 說:
That's my main point.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap
Claire 說:
Do you have other position?
Claire 說:
Law ?
Claire 說:
Law of abortion!
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Claire 說:
you say you want to mention
Elsa 說:
(3) The third annotation is the world trend of abortion law.
Elsa 說:
Audience:
People who do not know the real condition about abortion around the world.
Elsa 說:
4) The fourth annotation is the reasons for those who oppose aborton.
Audience:
People who want to know why be anti-abortion
蘇菲亞 說:
I THINK THAT YOUR VIEWPOINT IS CLEAR
蘇菲亞 說:
AND PRECISE
Claire 說:
Yup~
Elsa 說:
Thank you!
Elsa 說:
3. Main points in each source that support your own argument/opinions.Do you organize the relations in discourses with a smoth connection and transition between sentences? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
(1) Obama's ideas have in common with my opinions. No woman make the decision casually.
(2) Those reasons can make people to t
Elsa 說:
(2) Those reasons can make people to think the necessity of abortion.
(3) Liberalization is the main trend of abortion laws.
(4) Show the purpose that those who oppose abortion might because some religion or the slogan of humanism, instead of caring for women and children.
Claire 說:
Is any problem you encounter in your paper?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and you make three points in your paper
蘇菲亞 說:
SO YOU QOUTE
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
discuss the three reasons
Elsa 說:
I do qoute some words in my article
Elsa 說:
But not much.
蘇菲亞 說:
OK
Claire 說:
What peron do you quote?
蘇菲亞 說:
I THINK EVERYBODY'S PROBLEMS IS THAT WE SHOULD CHECK THE SPELLING
蘇菲亞 說:
THE COHERENCE
蘇菲亞 說:
THE CONJUNCTION
Elsa 說:
Yes. So the peer feedback is important
Elsa 說:
I do add my peer's opinions, because they pointed out the weak point of my article. I know how to make my article more fluent by their opinions.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
YES I ALSO AGREE THAT
Elsa 說:
To the fifth question.
Elsa 說:
(1) The weak point of my article is that I could not deny that those unborn babies have human rights too.
Elsa 說:
2) I added more ideas to my final paper
1. The world trend
2. The uniqe condition of each woman
3. Looking from the other points of view (anti-abortion)
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
蘇菲亞 說:
so you have stated your position
蘇菲亞 說:
that's cool
Claire 說:
Pefect~
Elsa 說:
But I do not know how to conquer the weak point
Elsa 說:
I just avoid to talk about that part...
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
it is really hard to correct
蘇菲亞 說:
if i were you, i would also avoid that part...
Claire 說:
The coherence?
Elsa 說:
Well... I am not sure whether my articles is coherent or not
Claire 說:
do you work strongly?
Claire 說:
And.........
Claire 說:
you told me that you have 6 pages "only"
Elsa 說:
I would try to make my article fluent
蘇菲亞 說:
i think we should go on to the next person
Elsa 說:
Ok.
蘇菲亞 說:
what is human right
蘇菲亞 說:
i mean at the same time now
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I'M NEXT
Claire 說:
Elsa works very hard!
蘇菲亞 說:
because elsa and claire had the same topic
蘇菲亞 說:
almost the same
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
SO CLAIRE
Claire 說:
different position
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
YOUR ARE THE NEXT ONE?
Elsa 說:
So hurry up
Claire 說:
I'm ok
Elsa 說:
Tell us the outlines in your paper
Claire 說:
abotion mental health
Claire 說:
abortion
蘇菲亞 說:
together
Claire 說:
My main outline includes abortion, and I would quote others to persuade others by using lot of science research and essay. The key words are the mental help, and psychology of abortion. Most information are English, because there are much more information what I want in the foreign website.
Claire 說:
These annotations information I use is Eclipse of Reason. Bernard N. Nathanson. Jan, 1985, The effects of abortion. Lisa Tolin. Psychology Today, Jul/Aug 97,
Abortion 'leaves mental legacy. 12 December 2005. BBC News,
, and Abortion and psychology. May 17, 2007. Washington Times
蘇菲亞 說:
mental help, and psychology of abortion.
蘇菲亞 說:
so you deal with the mental problem
Claire 說:
These annotations information I use is Eclipse of Reason. Bernard N. Nathanson. Jan, 1985, The effects of abortion. Lisa Tolin. Psychology Today, Jul/Aug 97,
Abortion 'leaves mental legacy. 12 December 2005. BBC News,
, and Abortion and psychology. May 17, 2007. Washington Times
Claire 說:
Yes
Claire 說:
psychology of abortion
Elsa 說:
So how did you deal with the other points of view such as woman's right?
Claire 說:
I choose to be pro-lifer.
Elsa 說:
How did you conquer the weak point?
Claire 說:
I use others' words
蘇菲亞 說:
or baby's right
Claire 說:
such as the Pope
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap
蘇菲亞 說:
baby's psychological problem
Claire 說:
It's psychological problem of women
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i agree with sophia
Claire 說:
Do you mean that I should develop baby's psychological problem?
Claire 說:
Then I can try.
蘇菲亞 說:
no
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
if you have enough time
Claire 說:
Ok
蘇菲亞 說:
because that's also elsa's problem
Claire 說:
Thanks
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
otherwise you must reorganize your issue paper
蘇菲亞 說:
both of you focus on the adults
蘇菲亞 說:
or don't point out the word "baby"
Elsa 說:
I see.
蘇菲亞 說:
otherwise you will have confrontation in your paper
Claire 說:
OK
蘇菲亞 說:
joyce
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
ok
Claire 說:
come to Joyce!!
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
The relationship between cosmetic surgery and the self-image
Why the trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is my topic(present)
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
Focus on three parts:
1. People are getting higher and higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
2. The media, the mass images of the beautiful celebrities, and the advertisements about the cosmetic surgery
3. The self-image, self-reflection and the social values
Social values affect the way we look ourselves.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so i make a deep discussion about these three topics
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
Search information in the key words
English > “self image” “plastic surgery”
Mostly in the website of the “All Business”
http://www.allbusiness.com/
Chinese> “整形文化” “自我形象” easy to get the full ideas and easy to understand
website全國碩博士論文資訊網
http://etds.ncl.edu.tw/theabs/index.html
Elsa 說:
I think that your standpoints are clear.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
thx
蘇菲亞 說:
but
蘇菲亞 說:
i don't know your viewpoints
蘇菲亞 說:
you support?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is just the outline
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
my ideas will be in the article
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i just categoly them
蘇菲亞 說:
just remind you
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i know that i will pay more attentio non this part
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
it is also my main problem thx for Sophia
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-image psychology
American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
Claire 說:
From TV! It's cool.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
every annotation stands for one point
蘇菲亞 說:
AND SALES
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so there are three stand points
蘇菲亞 說:
YOU FIND LOTS OF INFORMATION
Elsa 說:
Don't forget to express your views when you use them.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
are you praising me?
蘇菲亞 說:
IN THE CONCLUSION PART YOU MIGHT WANT TO ORGANIZE THEM AGAIN IN BRIEF WORDS
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
The higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
The higher standard about aesthetic
>contribute to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year
The pursuit of attractiveness and good identification are the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-imThis article puts much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives.
age psychology
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself The cultural surroundings which affected the social values people have to self-image and the appearance.
The massive images of the celebrities and advertisements
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Film clip
The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
every annatation stands for one point
Elsa 說:
Do you have problems when you use these information?
蘇菲亞 說:
for example the meaning
蘇菲亞 說:
or some conflict
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yes, at first i can't find any essay on the internet
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
after a long long stuggling, i found and useful website
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
that's the begining of my annatation
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
that's why i post my articles in the blogger so late
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so sophia has pointed out that
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I do quote some phrases in my paper but not much. Mostly I paraphrase the original articles and use my own words to explain.
蘇菲亞 說:
i think that you could qoate
to be more persuasive
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Elsa 說:
Using the words from convincing resouces will helpful
Claire 說:
That's right~
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap i agree with you
i will improve that
蘇菲亞 說:
SO ANY PROBLEMS?
DID YOU CHANGE YOUR POSITION
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I THINK NOT
I AGREE WITH THE POINTS
and i agree with the attitude toward cosmetic surgery
Elsa 說:
If there is no problems...
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is the end maybe
1. Paper outlines including the title and 1-3 keywords (e.g., euthanasia, gay and lesbian marriage, animal rights, etc). Do you search information using these keywords? In English or Chinese? Why?
Title: Could Gay be Gay?
Key words: Gay
I do research information through this keyword in both English and Chinese because I think that I could gather more information on the topic by doing so.
蘇菲亞 說:
However, I found mostly English version.
Elsa 說:
You just use a key word "Gay"?
蘇菲亞 說:
Yes
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and then you could find many articles
蘇菲亞 說:
now that it is a broad topic it is easy to find information.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so great and convenient
Elsa 說:
Then, you must be tired to find the information you want. Because there are too many information
Claire 說:
Both English and Chinese?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and maybe you can narrow your key words
蘇菲亞 說:
But I ONLY USE ONE WORD
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so the information you find may to be too broad for you
Elsa 說:
That's ok. If you can find the source you want.
Claire 說:
There must have lots of article
Elsa 說:
But you might spend more time.
蘇菲亞 說:
So what do you think I shoul;ld type?
Claire 說:
So you do the topic in extensive way?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the topic you choose may to broad for you
蘇菲亞 說:
SO WHAT SHOULD I DO
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
you can try to key in the keywords longer and explain detailly about your subject
Elsa 說:
It depends on what aspects you want to discuss.
Claire 說:
To narrow down the certain point of gay
蘇菲亞 說:
OK
蘇菲亞 說:
( 1 )
Ideology- Queer Cinema.
Louis Giannetti (1997). Understanding Movies, the eleventh edition, p.483-p.489. New jersey.
Intended audiences: Those who are interested in analyzing movies.
I think that it is quite interesting for it explain the ideology on homosexuality by analyzing the movies through media that we are familiar with.
蘇菲亞 說:
This is my citation
蘇菲亞 說:
The answer to the second question
蘇菲亞 說:
( 2 )
Gay Genes, Revisited.
LeVay, Tim; Hamer. Scientific American(1994, May), Vol. 270 Issue 5, p44, 6p Abstract: Two pieces of evidence, a structure within the human brain and a genetic link, point to a biological component for male homosexuality [ABSTRACT FROM PUBLISHER] (AN 14327844)
Intended audiences: Academic paper.
蘇菲亞 說:
The author gave out some results of the experiments and tries to convince the readers his point of view.
Difficulties: Some of the concepts in the articles are expressed in the scientific way. Thus, I may feel confused.
蘇菲亞 說:
Do Gays Have a Choice?
Epstein, Robert. Scientific American Mind, Feb/Mar2006, Vol. 17 Issue 1, p50, 8p Abstract: Science offers a clear and surprising answer to a controversial question [ABSTRACT FROM AUTHOR] (AN 23432303)
From http://web.ebscohost.com/ehost/pdf?vid=3&hid=3&sid=0ef80f05-7ac0-4011-a81c-1967ab28d5c1%40sessionmgr9
Intended audiences: Academic paper.
蘇菲亞 說:
The author stated different factors in the article that explain the cause of the sexual tendency. He did make his idea clear.
蘇菲亞 說:
( 4 )
Anonymous (September 7, 2004). Taiwan.
Web Site: http://www.jamessteed.com/gayson/gayson.htm
Intended audiences: General people. The web site contained the explanation of homosexuality so that people may get more information on the topic. By knowing more information, we might have less discrimination among them.
蘇菲亞 說:
( 5 )
Could Gay be Gay?
Anonymous
Web Site: http://www.youtube.com/v/V1iEpBsNIBU&hl=zh_TW&fs=1
Intended audiences: General people. Through the explanation on the topic, most of people could get to know more about gays/ lesbians ( their thoughts for example).
蘇菲亞 說:
That's all to the second question.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the first citation :i think it is great that you use the book we have studied in this semester as your reference
蘇菲亞 說:
The fact is you have to attack me
Claire 說:
Ideology!!!Interesting!(When night is falling )
蘇菲亞 說:
I don't know whether I had do the citation properly.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the idea is great
蘇菲亞 說:
BUT
Elsa 說:
How do you use the second reference in your final paper? Since you said you are confused about that.
蘇菲亞 說:
OH YEAH
蘇菲亞 說:
I mean some of the idea it mentioned in the article.
蘇菲亞 說:
Thanks
Claire 說:
Because it's a academic paper ?
蘇菲亞 說:
I WOULD REVISE THE SENTENSE
蘇菲亞 說:
Yes
Elsa 說:
You can add that if you agree with the standpoints in the sources.
Claire 說:
Are there lot of new terms should be explained?
蘇菲亞 說:
No.
蘇菲亞 說:
It's not the term but the words it used in the articles.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so you creat th eterm by tourself?
Claire 說:
So how do you overcpme the problem?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
sorry foe misspelling
蘇菲亞 說:
3. How do you use these sources to support your own argument/opinions or as references for facts? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
I do quote some words, and sentences in my final paper because they supported my opinion.
蘇菲亞 說:
4. What revisions have you made compared to your annotations? What drives you to make revisions? Do you polish your language and pay attention to cohesion and coherence in your final paper?
I made some revisions by referring to the comments I received from peer working.
蘇菲亞 說:
5. What perspectives have you changed compared to your issue paper? Did you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
I did add my peer’s opinion in my issue paper because they pointed out the shortcomings that I did not realize before.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so do you paraphrase the qoutes
蘇菲亞 說:
Before i want to change my position and focus on the cutural environment
蘇菲亞 說:
but i found out that all of the infromation that i have found was about the scientific problems
蘇菲亞 說:
yes i do qoute
Elsa 說:
So you need to find more evidence instead of the scientific problems
Claire 說:
What words do you quote?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the most important thing is you need to paraphrase them in your own ideas
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
did you do that?(attacking)
蘇菲亞 說:
(i can feel that
蘇菲亞 說:
it's hard to say it over here
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i know that you have paraphrased them
蘇菲亞 說:
i had put the quotation mark in my paragraph
蘇菲亞 說:
actually i quote
蘇菲亞 說:
and also paraphrased
Claire 說:
Do you have coherence between the paragraph?
Elsa 說:
Some conjunctions
蘇菲亞 說:
I...am not sure about that
蘇菲亞 說:
i think i did....吧
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
do make the mistake as same as me
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
don't
Elsa 說:
Well. You can do it better when you looking your sentence again.
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
Claire 說:
Check it again!
蘇菲亞 說:
so is that all?
蘇菲亞 說:
OK!
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
when i read your annatation, i find that overally there are not some serious problems in your article
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the grammar and spelling is ok
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the coherence is not too bad
Elsa 說:
You did a good job.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
but you stll have to polish them into a btter one
Claire 說:
serious problems?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
better
Claire 說:
So?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
the conjuntions
Elsa 說:
conjunctions
Claire 說:
OH! OK
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so the next parts?
Elsa 說:
I can start to present
Claire 說:
OK
Claire 說:
Abortion!
Elsa 說:
Abortion: A Serious Challenge between Morality and Women’s right
Elsa 說:
key words:abortion, women's human rights
Elsa 說:
I search the information on internet database with these words in English way. Because I want to know more about the cases and the world trend of abortion. By using the keywords, I do find many information and some of them support to my opinion.
Elsa 說:
1. Women's consideration (Reasons for abortion)
2. Human rights (Research about the abortion laws)
3. Looking from another standpoints ( the thoughts of those who anti-abortion)
Elsa 說:
That's the outlines of my paper.
Elsa 說:
2. Topics/themes in four annotations and their intended audiences
Elsa 說:
1) The first annotation is videos about the opinions of Obama, the president-elect in America. He thinks that limit the liberty of abortion may harm women's human right.
Audience:
People who care about the relationship between abortion and government.
Claire 說:
So you emphasize women's human rights?
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Elsa 說:
That's my main point.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap
Claire 說:
Do you have other position?
Claire 說:
Law ?
Claire 說:
Law of abortion!
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Claire 說:
you say you want to mention
Elsa 說:
(3) The third annotation is the world trend of abortion law.
Elsa 說:
Audience:
People who do not know the real condition about abortion around the world.
Elsa 說:
4) The fourth annotation is the reasons for those who oppose aborton.
Audience:
People who want to know why be anti-abortion
蘇菲亞 說:
I THINK THAT YOUR VIEWPOINT IS CLEAR
蘇菲亞 說:
AND PRECISE
Claire 說:
Yup~
Elsa 說:
Thank you!
Elsa 說:
3. Main points in each source that support your own argument/opinions.Do you organize the relations in discourses with a smoth connection and transition between sentences? Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
(1) Obama's ideas have in common with my opinions. No woman make the decision casually.
(2) Those reasons can make people to t
Elsa 說:
(2) Those reasons can make people to think the necessity of abortion.
(3) Liberalization is the main trend of abortion laws.
(4) Show the purpose that those who oppose abortion might because some religion or the slogan of humanism, instead of caring for women and children.
Claire 說:
Is any problem you encounter in your paper?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
and you make three points in your paper
蘇菲亞 說:
SO YOU QOUTE
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
discuss the three reasons
Elsa 說:
I do qoute some words in my article
Elsa 說:
But not much.
蘇菲亞 說:
OK
Claire 說:
What peron do you quote?
蘇菲亞 說:
I THINK EVERYBODY'S PROBLEMS IS THAT WE SHOULD CHECK THE SPELLING
蘇菲亞 說:
THE COHERENCE
蘇菲亞 說:
THE CONJUNCTION
Elsa 說:
Yes. So the peer feedback is important
Elsa 說:
I do add my peer's opinions, because they pointed out the weak point of my article. I know how to make my article more fluent by their opinions.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
YES I ALSO AGREE THAT
Elsa 說:
To the fifth question.
Elsa 說:
(1) The weak point of my article is that I could not deny that those unborn babies have human rights too.
Elsa 說:
2) I added more ideas to my final paper
1. The world trend
2. The uniqe condition of each woman
3. Looking from the other points of view (anti-abortion)
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
蘇菲亞 說:
so you have stated your position
蘇菲亞 說:
that's cool
Claire 說:
Pefect~
Elsa 說:
But I do not know how to conquer the weak point
Elsa 說:
I just avoid to talk about that part...
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
it is really hard to correct
蘇菲亞 說:
if i were you, i would also avoid that part...
Claire 說:
The coherence?
Elsa 說:
Well... I am not sure whether my articles is coherent or not
Claire 說:
do you work strongly?
Claire 說:
And.........
Claire 說:
you told me that you have 6 pages "only"
Elsa 說:
I would try to make my article fluent
蘇菲亞 說:
i think we should go on to the next person
Elsa 說:
Ok.
蘇菲亞 說:
what is human right
蘇菲亞 說:
i mean at the same time now
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I'M NEXT
Claire 說:
Elsa works very hard!
蘇菲亞 說:
because elsa and claire had the same topic
蘇菲亞 說:
almost the same
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
SO CLAIRE
Claire 說:
different position
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
YOUR ARE THE NEXT ONE?
Elsa 說:
So hurry up
Claire 說:
I'm ok
Elsa 說:
Tell us the outlines in your paper
Claire 說:
abotion mental health
Claire 說:
abortion
蘇菲亞 說:
together
Claire 說:
My main outline includes abortion, and I would quote others to persuade others by using lot of science research and essay. The key words are the mental help, and psychology of abortion. Most information are English, because there are much more information what I want in the foreign website.
Claire 說:
These annotations information I use is Eclipse of Reason. Bernard N. Nathanson. Jan, 1985, The effects of abortion. Lisa Tolin. Psychology Today, Jul/Aug 97,
Abortion 'leaves mental legacy. 12 December 2005. BBC News,
, and Abortion and psychology. May 17, 2007. Washington Times
蘇菲亞 說:
mental help, and psychology of abortion.
蘇菲亞 說:
so you deal with the mental problem
Claire 說:
These annotations information I use is Eclipse of Reason. Bernard N. Nathanson. Jan, 1985, The effects of abortion. Lisa Tolin. Psychology Today, Jul/Aug 97,
Abortion 'leaves mental legacy. 12 December 2005. BBC News,
, and Abortion and psychology. May 17, 2007. Washington Times
Claire 說:
Yes
Claire 說:
psychology of abortion
Elsa 說:
So how did you deal with the other points of view such as woman's right?
Claire 說:
I choose to be pro-lifer.
Elsa 說:
How did you conquer the weak point?
Claire 說:
I use others' words
蘇菲亞 說:
or baby's right
Claire 說:
such as the Pope
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap
蘇菲亞 說:
baby's psychological problem
Claire 說:
It's psychological problem of women
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i agree with sophia
Claire 說:
Do you mean that I should develop baby's psychological problem?
Claire 說:
Then I can try.
蘇菲亞 說:
no
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
if you have enough time
Claire 說:
Ok
蘇菲亞 說:
because that's also elsa's problem
Claire 說:
Thanks
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
otherwise you must reorganize your issue paper
蘇菲亞 說:
both of you focus on the adults
蘇菲亞 說:
or don't point out the word "baby"
Elsa 說:
I see.
蘇菲亞 說:
otherwise you will have confrontation in your paper
Claire 說:
OK
蘇菲亞 說:
joyce
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
ok
Claire 說:
come to Joyce!!
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
The relationship between cosmetic surgery and the self-image
Why the trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is my topic(present)
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
Focus on three parts:
1. People are getting higher and higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
2. The media, the mass images of the beautiful celebrities, and the advertisements about the cosmetic surgery
3. The self-image, self-reflection and the social values
Social values affect the way we look ourselves.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so i make a deep discussion about these three topics
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
Search information in the key words
English > “self image” “plastic surgery”
Mostly in the website of the “All Business”
http://www.allbusiness.com/
Chinese> “整形文化” “自我形象” easy to get the full ideas and easy to understand
website全國碩博士論文資訊網
http://etds.ncl.edu.tw/theabs/index.html
Elsa 說:
I think that your standpoints are clear.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
thx
蘇菲亞 說:
but
蘇菲亞 說:
i don't know your viewpoints
蘇菲亞 說:
you support?
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is just the outline
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
my ideas will be in the article
蘇菲亞 說:
ok
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i just categoly them
蘇菲亞 說:
just remind you
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
i know that i will pay more attentio non this part
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
it is also my main problem thx for Sophia
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-image psychology
American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
Claire 說:
From TV! It's cool.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
every annotation stands for one point
蘇菲亞 說:
AND SALES
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so there are three stand points
蘇菲亞 說:
YOU FIND LOTS OF INFORMATION
Elsa 說:
Don't forget to express your views when you use them.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
are you praising me?
蘇菲亞 說:
IN THE CONCLUSION PART YOU MIGHT WANT TO ORGANIZE THEM AGAIN IN BRIEF WORDS
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
The higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
The higher standard about aesthetic
>contribute to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year
The pursuit of attractiveness and good identification are the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-imThis article puts much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives.
age psychology
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself The cultural surroundings which affected the social values people have to self-image and the appearance.
The massive images of the celebrities and advertisements
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Film clip
The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
every annatation stands for one point
Elsa 說:
Do you have problems when you use these information?
蘇菲亞 說:
for example the meaning
蘇菲亞 說:
or some conflict
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yes, at first i can't find any essay on the internet
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
after a long long stuggling, i found and useful website
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
that's the begining of my annatation
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
that's why i post my articles in the blogger so late
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
so sophia has pointed out that
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I do quote some phrases in my paper but not much. Mostly I paraphrase the original articles and use my own words to explain.
蘇菲亞 說:
i think that you could qoate
to be more persuasive
Elsa 說:
Yes.
Elsa 說:
Using the words from convincing resouces will helpful
Claire 說:
That's right~
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
yap i agree with you
i will improve that
蘇菲亞 說:
SO ANY PROBLEMS?
DID YOU CHANGE YOUR POSITION
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
I THINK NOT
I AGREE WITH THE POINTS
and i agree with the attitude toward cosmetic surgery
Elsa 說:
If there is no problems...
[ 耐心 patient] ：) 說:
this is the end maybe
Research paper questions
3. Main points in each source that support your own argument/opinions.
Do you organize the relations in discourses with a smoth connection and transition between sentences?
Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
>>Yes, I do quote some phrases in my paper but not much. Mostly I paraphrase the original articles and use my own words to explain.
4. Revisions that you have made compared to annotations.
Do you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
Do you polish your language (e.g., verb tense, s-v agreement, word form, run-on, sentece structure, informal, etc)?
>>I have made some correction. I much more focus on the conjunction problems when I'm writing. Moreover, I pay more attention on my grammar problems.
5. Perspectives that you have added or changed compared to issue papers.
>>In fact, through the research of this topic, I really get lots of information which I never thought of before. It is really interesting that the cosmetic surgery has close relationship with many social surroundings. Not until you make the deep study of one issue do you realize the complicated and profound meanings of it. I think that cosmetic surgery is really an interesting topic to discuss.
6.What revisions have you made compared to your annotations?
What drives you to make revisions? Do you polish your language and pay attention to cohesion and coherence in your final paper?
>>I think that the comments from the classmates and the advice of teacher are the main reasons that drive me to revise the annotations. Compared to the former annotations, I find that the conjunctions problems have decreased a lot. After all, I pay much more attention to it.
7.What perspectives have you changed compared to your issue paper?
Did you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
>>I really add some of my peer's opinions.
Do you organize the relations in discourses with a smoth connection and transition between sentences?
Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
>>Yes, I do quote some phrases in my paper but not much. Mostly I paraphrase the original articles and use my own words to explain.
4. Revisions that you have made compared to annotations.
Do you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
Do you polish your language (e.g., verb tense, s-v agreement, word form, run-on, sentece structure, informal, etc)?
>>I have made some correction. I much more focus on the conjunction problems when I'm writing. Moreover, I pay more attention on my grammar problems.
5. Perspectives that you have added or changed compared to issue papers.
>>In fact, through the research of this topic, I really get lots of information which I never thought of before. It is really interesting that the cosmetic surgery has close relationship with many social surroundings. Not until you make the deep study of one issue do you realize the complicated and profound meanings of it. I think that cosmetic surgery is really an interesting topic to discuss.
6.What revisions have you made compared to your annotations?
What drives you to make revisions? Do you polish your language and pay attention to cohesion and coherence in your final paper?
>>I think that the comments from the classmates and the advice of teacher are the main reasons that drive me to revise the annotations. Compared to the former annotations, I find that the conjunctions problems have decreased a lot. After all, I pay much more attention to it.
7.What perspectives have you changed compared to your issue paper?
Did you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
>>I really add some of my peer's opinions.
Research Paper Presentation (questions)
This course takes a learner-centered process approach to writing. Peer response and revision is as important as the final product. The self-reflection task also addresses the dual audience of self and other.
The blog illuminates a writer's journey for the reader. You should manage and present various tasks and drafts in a clear way.
The textbook includes much information to train reader-judges. At this final stage of the course, please Review the main ideas that we cover in classes and look at the last chapter for editing skills, which would help you and your peers find major errors in logic and grammar.
To facilitate research paper presentation and sharing, please post your draft on blogs. Peer response should focus on the following questions.
1. Paper outlines with the title and 1-3 keywords (e.g., euthanasia, gay and lesbian marriage, animal rights, etc).
Do you search information using these keywords? In English or Chinese? Why?
Do the title and keywords forecast a convincing thesis or an attitude toward the subject?
2. Topics/themes in four annotations and their intended audiences (e.g., general, academic, customers, peers and friends, other).
Do the library and Web sources provide sound reasons and proper evidence?
Do you use shared contextual knowledge (e.g.,experiences, emotions, cultures) to support your argument and opinions?
3. Main points in each source that support your own argument/opinions.
Do you organize the relations in discourses with a smoth connection and transition between sentences?
Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
4. Revisions that you have made compared to annotations.
Do you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
Do you polish your language (e.g., verb tense, s-v agreement, word form, run-on, sentece structure, informal, etc)?
5. Perspectives that you have added or changed compared to issue papers.
Do you find weak reasoning and errors of logic (e.g., irrelevant, oversimplification, overgeneralization, false analogy, undefined terms, etc)?
Do you change your question or problem during the course of study?
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The blog illuminates a writer's journey for the reader. You should manage and present various tasks and drafts in a clear way.
The textbook includes much information to train reader-judges. At this final stage of the course, please Review the main ideas that we cover in classes and look at the last chapter for editing skills, which would help you and your peers find major errors in logic and grammar.
To facilitate research paper presentation and sharing, please post your draft on blogs. Peer response should focus on the following questions.
1. Paper outlines with the title and 1-3 keywords (e.g., euthanasia, gay and lesbian marriage, animal rights, etc).
Do you search information using these keywords? In English or Chinese? Why?
Do the title and keywords forecast a convincing thesis or an attitude toward the subject?
2. Topics/themes in four annotations and their intended audiences (e.g., general, academic, customers, peers and friends, other).
Do the library and Web sources provide sound reasons and proper evidence?
Do you use shared contextual knowledge (e.g.,experiences, emotions, cultures) to support your argument and opinions?
3. Main points in each source that support your own argument/opinions.
Do you organize the relations in discourses with a smoth connection and transition between sentences?
Do you quote some words, phrases, or sentences directly from the original texts or paraphrase them?
4. Revisions that you have made compared to annotations.
Do you add your peer's opinions? Why or why not?
Do you polish your language (e.g., verb tense, s-v agreement, word form, run-on, sentece structure, informal, etc)?
5. Perspectives that you have added or changed compared to issue papers.
Do you find weak reasoning and errors of logic (e.g., irrelevant, oversimplification, overgeneralization, false analogy, undefined terms, etc)?
Do you change your question or problem during the course of study?
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Topic and theme in four annotations
2. 4 full citations//Topics/themes in four annotations and their intended audiences.
Four full citations
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
The higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
The higher standard about aesthetic
>contribute to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year
The pursuit of attractiveness and good identification are the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery
(the aspects of the first part)
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-image psychology
American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
This article puts much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives.
What are the standards of aesthetics? The self-image -the mental picture of what we think and look ourselves from our point of views
The public ideas and judgments we always identify with
(the aspects of the third part)
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
The cultural surroundings which affected the social values people have to self-image and the appearance.
The massive images of the celebrities and advertisements
(the aspects of the second part)
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
Film clip
The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
Beauty really does matter but not all
But like our looks and accept the way we are born with.
Four full citations
1. Annotation1- surgeons Enhance Patient’s Self-Image
Whittington, Jane.(2006,December 1). Publicized in Greater Lansing Business Monthly [Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/health-care-social-assistance/ambulatory-health-services/4059428-1.html
The higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
The higher standard about aesthetic
>contribute to the uprising rate of the patients taking cosmetic surgery every year
The pursuit of attractiveness and good identification are the primary reason that promotes people to take cosmetic surgery
(the aspects of the first part)
2. Annotation 2- Power of self-image psychology
American Salesman.(2003,May 3).Power of self-image psychology[Electronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/sales/526958-1.html
This article puts much emphasis on how self-image affects the attitudes people have toward their lives.
What are the standards of aesthetics? The self-image -the mental picture of what we think and look ourselves from our point of views
The public ideas and judgments we always identify with
(the aspects of the third part)
3. Annotation 3- Be Yourself Nicole Porter.(2006,September 8).Be Yourself.[Eletronic version], from http://www.allbusiness.com/services/amusement-recreation-services/4574935-1.html
The cultural surroundings which affected the social values people have to self-image and the appearance.
The massive images of the celebrities and advertisements
(the aspects of the second part)
4. Annotation 4- Image and Self-Image Alkistis TV.(2007).Image and self image,from http://tw.youtube.com/watch?v=UI5Uy1lWUPQ
Film clip
The author mentioned that self-esteem has to do with our appearances.
Beauty really does matter but not all
But like our looks and accept the way we are born with.
Paper outline
1.Paper outlines including the title and 1-3 keywords Do you search information using these keywords? In English or Chinese? Why?
Paper outline
The relationship between cosmetic surgery and the self-image
Why the trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world?
Focus on three parts:
1. People are getting higher and higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
2. The media, the mass images of the beautiful celebrities, and the advertisements about the cosmetic surgery
3. The self-image, self-reflection and the social values
Social values affect the way we look ourselves.
Search information in the key words
English > “self image” “plastic surgery”
Mostly in the website of the “All Business”
http://www.allbusiness.com/
Chinese> “整形文化” “自我形象” easy to get the full ideas and easy to understand
website全國碩博士論文資訊網
http://etds.ncl.edu.tw/theabs/index.html
Paper outline
The relationship between cosmetic surgery and the self-image
Why the trend of having cosmetic surgery has prevailed over the world?
Focus on three parts:
1. People are getting higher and higher acceptance of cosmetic surgery
2. The media, the mass images of the beautiful celebrities, and the advertisements about the cosmetic surgery
3. The self-image, self-reflection and the social values
Social values affect the way we look ourselves.
Search information in the key words
English > “self image” “plastic surgery”
Mostly in the website of the “All Business”
http://www.allbusiness.com/
Chinese> “整形文化” “自我形象” easy to get the full ideas and easy to understand
website全國碩博士論文資訊網
http://etds.ncl.edu.tw/theabs/index.html
Reflection 2
Reflection 2
This is the second meeting in this semester. Different from the first one, this time I have all my four annotations in the blog although they are not fully complete and organized. The main point of this meeting is focusing on the midterm exam paper. The original one which we have done in few months ago is really different from the revised version. This time, we have the comments from all the classmates in this class which sums total eleven. We need to adopt members’ comments and try to revise our article. However, this is really difficult for one person to make a big modification of his writing style which has been rooted in our inner patterns of grammatical system. Sometimes we know the problems of our own; nevertheless to accept the comments is one thing, to modify is another. Indeed, it is really difficult to modify the writing problems, but I will try my best to pay more attention to the blind points in the process of writing.
The main problem in my writing is the incoherence of each paragraph. The use of the conjunction words in the articles is really important. The way to connect your ideas is by using the conjunctions to make the whole article more fluent and organized. After the discussing with teacher and classmates, I learned some ideas and problems in my writing and also got the information of how to write my article well.
In the next part, I want to talk about my topic of the final paper. It’s been a long time since the first reflection had been posted. I remember that I have decided to make research about the relationship between the social values and the culture of cosmetic surgery. However, after I decide to choose this topic, I found that it is really difficult to find the research paper relate to the topic of the relationship between cosmetic surgery and self-image. Indeed I have the difficulty in getting the information. However, after surfing the Internet for a long time, I finally find a useful website that provides me with lots of articles that are helpful for me to go further to my study.
After getting the information I want and finishing the four annotations, the most difficult thing is to connect all the articles you have written into a large and coherent paper. In the process of writing, I have met the problem in connecting the four annotations together. Actually every article stands for different points and ideas. You must organize your whole paper into the coherent one. One of the ways to make essay more coherent is by using the transitional and conjunctional words well. This problem has been raised as my serious blind point before. This time, I pay more attention to this part when revising the draft and try to delete some inappropriate paragraphs which may make the audiences have difficulty in understanding. It really takes time in doing this long essay; however, once you finish it, you may feel a sense of accomplishment and feel much relieved.
This is the second meeting in this semester. Different from the first one, this time I have all my four annotations in the blog although they are not fully complete and organized. The main point of this meeting is focusing on the midterm exam paper. The original one which we have done in few months ago is really different from the revised version. This time, we have the comments from all the classmates in this class which sums total eleven. We need to adopt members’ comments and try to revise our article. However, this is really difficult for one person to make a big modification of his writing style which has been rooted in our inner patterns of grammatical system. Sometimes we know the problems of our own; nevertheless to accept the comments is one thing, to modify is another. Indeed, it is really difficult to modify the writing problems, but I will try my best to pay more attention to the blind points in the process of writing.
The main problem in my writing is the incoherence of each paragraph. The use of the conjunction words in the articles is really important. The way to connect your ideas is by using the conjunctions to make the whole article more fluent and organized. After the discussing with teacher and classmates, I learned some ideas and problems in my writing and also got the information of how to write my article well.
In the next part, I want to talk about my topic of the final paper. It’s been a long time since the first reflection had been posted. I remember that I have decided to make research about the relationship between the social values and the culture of cosmetic surgery. However, after I decide to choose this topic, I found that it is really difficult to find the research paper relate to the topic of the relationship between cosmetic surgery and self-image. Indeed I have the difficulty in getting the information. However, after surfing the Internet for a long time, I finally find a useful website that provides me with lots of articles that are helpful for me to go further to my study.
After getting the information I want and finishing the four annotations, the most difficult thing is to connect all the articles you have written into a large and coherent paper. In the process of writing, I have met the problem in connecting the four annotations together. Actually every article stands for different points and ideas. You must organize your whole paper into the coherent one. One of the ways to make essay more coherent is by using the transitional and conjunctional words well. This problem has been raised as my serious blind point before. This time, I pay more attention to this part when revising the draft and try to delete some inappropriate paragraphs which may make the audiences have difficulty in understanding. It really takes time in doing this long essay; however, once you finish it, you may feel a sense of accomplishment and feel much relieved.
2009年1月2日 星期五
Book Review group essay
This semester we have learned lots of writing skills and the steps of how to write an essay from the book “Steps to Writing Well” written by Jean Wyrick. This book guides us to write a variety of essays by following the steps from the basic elements to the advanced skills which provides us an elementary direction to the world of writing. In the following, we would make a brief introduction of this book
When composing works, we need to pay attention to several problems. Firstly, discover our audience is important. We have to change our style of writing and the form of composing our works so as to meet different readers request. Remember to organize our writings with clear thesis statements; we should not bore them with confusion, and disorder. Thus, to interest the readers with a sexy topic is really important. Also, choose to describe things in objective or subjective way. Different writing categories such as argumentations and descriptions have different writing methods. Secondly, try to convince the readers with abundant evidences to support our ideas. Besides, we can make our essays vivid by using sensory details. Thirdly, after finishing writing the articles, we have to revise them. Think of the questions such as whether the topics are too broad or too narrow, does specific ideas support our viewpoint and so on. Grammar, punctuation, word choice and usage are also what we should pay attention to. In addition, we could also ask someone else to look over our works, because with their help, we could find out more faults that we have not realized. Last but not the least, we have to write down the citation in a proper format.
All of these writing skills are contained in the book and really offers us a clear and complete guideline to writing well. Besides the brief introduction of this book, the following are some of the favorite chapters we think of as the most important and impress us the most.
To begin with, we discussed about which chapter is our favorite one. Most of us thought that Chapter 18 “Writing about Film” is the most impressive and interesting chapter. Sophia’s group introduced about how to analyze a film, and the clips they chose made their report become more abundant. We also connected this chapter with Jerome’s film class and Stewart’s movie discussion class. Then, we turned to regard some important writing skills when we are going to organize an essay. Recognizing your purpose and choosing the topic carefully should be consider in the first place. Knowing who the readers are, trying to interest and convince them with your unique viewpoints and feelings are significant. In addition, providing specific examples to support your ideas, building the arguments and giving out your position are necessary, too. In chapter 10, using appropriate tone and seeing the opposite points of view could help us to fight against those people who have opposite opinions.
Afterwards, the problems we should avoid became our discussing topic. In chapter 20 and 21, the usage of grammar and punctuation are pointed out. The order of time and space and the transitional words between each paragraph are also needed to be considered. Besides, we learned how to put the source and the author’s name in a correct form in chapter 14. The citation made the reference we used clearly. When we are going to write an article, remember to use the concise words and keep asking “why”. It can help us to express our meanings more concrete. At last, by the process of revising, our defects of writing can be improved. It is the only way to make our articles become better and smoothly.
When composing works, we need to pay attention to several problems. Firstly, discover our audience is important. We have to change our style of writing and the form of composing our works so as to meet different readers request. Remember to organize our writings with clear thesis statements; we should not bore them with confusion, and disorder. Thus, to interest the readers with a sexy topic is really important. Also, choose to describe things in objective or subjective way. Different writing categories such as argumentations and descriptions have different writing methods. Secondly, try to convince the readers with abundant evidences to support our ideas. Besides, we can make our essays vivid by using sensory details. Thirdly, after finishing writing the articles, we have to revise them. Think of the questions such as whether the topics are too broad or too narrow, does specific ideas support our viewpoint and so on. Grammar, punctuation, word choice and usage are also what we should pay attention to. In addition, we could also ask someone else to look over our works, because with their help, we could find out more faults that we have not realized. Last but not the least, we have to write down the citation in a proper format.
All of these writing skills are contained in the book and really offers us a clear and complete guideline to writing well. Besides the brief introduction of this book, the following are some of the favorite chapters we think of as the most important and impress us the most.
To begin with, we discussed about which chapter is our favorite one. Most of us thought that Chapter 18 “Writing about Film” is the most impressive and interesting chapter. Sophia’s group introduced about how to analyze a film, and the clips they chose made their report become more abundant. We also connected this chapter with Jerome’s film class and Stewart’s movie discussion class. Then, we turned to regard some important writing skills when we are going to organize an essay. Recognizing your purpose and choosing the topic carefully should be consider in the first place. Knowing who the readers are, trying to interest and convince them with your unique viewpoints and feelings are significant. In addition, providing specific examples to support your ideas, building the arguments and giving out your position are necessary, too. In chapter 10, using appropriate tone and seeing the opposite points of view could help us to fight against those people who have opposite opinions.
Afterwards, the problems we should avoid became our discussing topic. In chapter 20 and 21, the usage of grammar and punctuation are pointed out. The order of time and space and the transitional words between each paragraph are also needed to be considered. Besides, we learned how to put the source and the author’s name in a correct form in chapter 14. The citation made the reference we used clearly. When we are going to write an article, remember to use the concise words and keep asking “why”. It can help us to express our meanings more concrete. At last, by the process of revising, our defects of writing can be improved. It is the only way to make our articles become better and smoothly.
Msn peer discussion 2 - Book Review
柳丁 說 (下午 10:10):
Sorry for late.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:10):
恩恩
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:10):
沒關係
涵兒 加入對話。
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:11):
So that's start
柳丁 說 (下午 10:11):
Ok.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:11):
two hours discussiong
涵兒 說 (下午 10:11):
ok~
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:13):
so first of all
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:13):
As for me, I think that Chapter 18 "Writing about Film" is my favorite chapter
柳丁 說 (下午 10:13):
Me too.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:14):
And your report also impressed me.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:14):
MOVIE
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:14):
We could connect the chapter with "Understanding Movies"
涵兒 說 (下午 10:14):
It's good~
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:14):
Oh I am flattered
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:15):
haha
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:15):
I THINK
柳丁 說 (下午 10:15):
The clips you chose connect with our Film class.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:16):
Run Lora Run
涵兒 說 (下午 10:16):
When we are talking about movies, I think I would come up with Jerome Class~
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:16):
stewart also talks movie in the oral training class
涵兒 說 (下午 10:17):
It's impressive to see the same clips in different classes!
柳丁 說 (下午 10:18):
And analyze the photography. Just like what we do on Jerome's class.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:19):
but can't put more emphasis on movie
柳丁 說 (下午 10:20):
Yes. I think we can talk about some writing skill in the text book.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:21):
Our group is talking about "Writing about Literature".
柳丁 說 (下午 10:22):
There are some things have to do when we are going to write or analyze the literature work.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:22):
I think it also applies to our reading in English or American literature.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:23):
We need to know what the author wants to express first.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:23):
and provide our own interpretation.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:24):
Yes, and that's really important, too
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:24):
i think we can list some important writing skills
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:24):
yeah
柳丁 說 (下午 10:25):
Ok.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:26):
Recongnize your purpose.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:27):
The first main point in chapter 11 and chapter 12. (Description and Narration)
涵兒 說 (下午 10:28):
Put your purpose under arrangement
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:28):
yeah the writing skill
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:29):
argumentation
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:29):
decription
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:29):
By the way, we have to know who are the readers
涵兒 說 (下午 10:30):
To interest the readers~
涵兒 說 (下午 10:30):
with your own topic!
柳丁 說 (下午 10:30):
You need to make your readers be convinced.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:32):
Some experiences can support your perspective.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:33):
You are right
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:33):
so we have to divide our paper in many parts
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:34):
So we have to choose our subject carefully
柳丁 說 (下午 10:36):
Also, choose to describe things in objective or subjective way.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:37):
And supporting our ideas with some research.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:37):
yeah
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:37):
and try to convince audieance
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:37):
audience
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:38):
you really did point out the point
柳丁 說 (下午 10:38):
Make readers see what you have found out and feel as your feeling.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:39):
Yeah, things that can move us can have stonger impact in our heart
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:39):
It's just like Approach to American Literature
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:39):
HAHA
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:40):
and oral training
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:40):
gee gee
涵兒 說 (下午 10:41):
Yup~
柳丁 說 (下午 10:41):
HA~The same skills can be used in all the classes.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:42):
All roads lead to Rome.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:43):
WE DON'T CARE THAT MUCH
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:43):
HAHA
柳丁 說 (下午 10:45):
Besides, we can make our essays vivid by using sensory details.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:46):
yeah
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:46):
tha;t the description
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:46):
the chapter i report
柳丁 說 (下午 10:46):
Sight, hearing, smell
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:47):
so it's the writting skill
柳丁 說 (下午 10:48):
Always asking "WHY" is also important
涵兒 說 (下午 10:48):
And with some logic in writting skills.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:48):
After finishing writing the articles, we have to revise them.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:48):
"Ask Why"
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:49):
can be related to the Accounting class XD
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:49):
so that;s the chapter 5
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:50):
1. What is the most interesting part and persuasive point in your essay.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:50):
It is also needed when we are reading a story or poem.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:50):
2.Is your topic too broad or too narrow
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:51):
3. What aspects might need more work
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:51):
4.Does specific idea support your idea
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:51):
Give out your position
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:52):
That's what we have to check out
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:52):
I agree your point
涵兒 說 (下午 10:52):
Yup.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:52):
All of the writing skill could be used in different types of writing
柳丁 說 (下午 10:53):
Yeah. You listed the points we should pay attention to.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:53):
After writing, we also need to revise~
涵兒 說 (下午 10:55):
Many problems in sentence clarity involve errors in grammar, punctuation, word choice and usage.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:55):
How to organize your essay effectively is significant.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:55):
Sometimes the readers might have trouble to understand.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:56):
1. Give your sentences content.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:56):
2. Make your sentences specific.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:57):
3. Avoid overpacking your sentences.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:57):
4. Fix fragments
涵兒 說 (下午 10:58):
5. Pay attention to word order.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:59):
This is the important points in Chapter 6.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:59):
yeah
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:59):
so it seems that we have lots of things to talk
柳丁 說 (下午 11:00):
That is talking about how to make our meanings clear in each sentences.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:00):
yes
涵兒 說 (下午 11:00):
I think developing a concise style is also important~
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:00):
tha's true
柳丁 說 (下午 11:02):
It is necessary to build argument when we are writing.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:03):
Explore the possibilities and your opinions.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:04):
Anticipate opposing views.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:04):
The classmates' comments are also very helpful~
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:05):
In chapter 10 for example, when writing an argumentation esay, we have to use "appropriate tone"
柳丁 說 (下午 11:05):
Just like what Claire and I do. We have different standpoint toward abortion.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:05):
yeah
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:05):
yeah
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:06):
different people can find out one another's weak point
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:06):
they could offer us some precious opinion
涵兒 說 (下午 11:07):
Yup~
柳丁 說 (下午 11:07):
And we also have to fight with each other to strengthen our viewpoint.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:09):
that;s right
涵兒 說 (下午 11:09):
Others' pointview can complement our views.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:09):
fight with othersXD
柳丁 說 (下午 11:10):
The point of view.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:10):
I usually fight with Elsa in the dorm. XXD
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:10):
XDD
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:10):
cool
柳丁 說 (下午 11:10):
No. That's not true~~~~
柳丁 說 (下午 11:11):
Haha
涵兒 說 (下午 11:11):
Since both of us are making the same topic.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:11):
I would so much like to hit my room mates
涵兒 說 (下午 11:11):
Ha~~
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:11):
by discussing your topics, I think you can really get some new ideas
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:11):
new concept
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:12):
YEAH
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:12):
i agree with it
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:12):
seeing the opposite point of views, you can find ways to "fight" back people that's in different position
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:13):
and other people will also give you advice
柳丁 說 (下午 11:13):
Yeah.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:14):
Maybe we can talk about some problems should be avoid.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:15):
grammar false
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:15):
unorganized article
涵兒 說 (下午 11:16):
wrong word choice.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:16):
Sudden change in perspective.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:19):
Chapter20
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:19):
It also pointed out some problems about errors in grammar
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:19):
yap
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:20):
In Chapter 21,also, talks of the importance of using punctuation
涵兒 說 (下午 11:20):
Yes~
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:21):
that's also the problems we should avoid
涵兒 說 (下午 11:21):
It does help~
柳丁 說 (下午 11:22):
Yes. It is the basic problems we should pay attention to.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:22):
But after getting lots of information in writing skills, I think when I start to write something, I still lose some points.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:24):
It is hard to achieve all the points, so we have to learn and revise.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:24):
Revising is important
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:26):
so we need to overcome these obstacles
柳丁 說 (下午 11:27):
The order of time and space the transitional words are needed to be consider. (Chapter 3)
柳丁 說 (下午 11:28):
Repetition of key words~
柳丁 說 (下午 11:29):
When we arrange the paragraphs
涵兒 說 (下午 11:31):
To present a clear thesis.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:37):
The beginnings and endings are the main factors to attract the readers.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:38):
Mmmm.....
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:38):
YES
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:39):
YEAH
涵兒 說 (下午 11:39):
Don't introduce new points or irrelevant material.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:39):
you guys really point out many ideas
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:39):
but we think we need to organized them
柳丁 說 (下午 11:40):
Ok.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:41):
Yup~
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:42):
oh
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:42):
by the way
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:42):
I THINK THAT
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:43):
Chapter 14 is really important
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:43):
YEAH
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:43):
I learned the style this semester
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:44):
that's what teacher focus on
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:44):
why
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:44):
before, I would just post the website
涵兒 說 (下午 11:44):
Ok~
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:44):
or simply paste the name of the author
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:44):
and would not do it in the rigt form
柳丁 說 (下午 11:45):
It is also important to search the online databases with concise keyword.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:45):
It's important to have work cited.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:47):
I usually ignored the citation in the past, too.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:48):
It's easy to forget
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:49):
haha
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:49):
take advantage of the websites
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:49):
the digital resourses
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:50):
yeah
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:51):
So shall we start to organize our conversation
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:53):
ok
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:53):
First of all, we have to discover our writing. We have to change our style of writing and the form of composing our works so as to meet different readers request.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:54):
Organize our writings with clear thesis statement, and remenber do not be vague in the writing.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:55):
We can make our paper better by revising.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:55):
Pay attention to our writings by using precise words and punctuation.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:55):
Avoid grammar and puntuation problems.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:55):
Do not confuse the readers.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:56):
Class discussion is also important. We can talk with our friends about our topics.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:56):
Everyone of us may point out the strong and weak point of our works.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:57):
Organize each paragraph logically. Make the argument and your interpretation clearly.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:57):
yeap
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:57):
so let's divide our discussion into many parts
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:58):
first, the general ideas about this book?? whcih parts affect you the most
柳丁 說 (上午 12:01):
Some general ideas have mentioned before.
涵兒 說 (上午 12:01):
I think the book gives me a useful skills about writing; And I think all of the parts are essential for me to develop the issue. Different parts focus on different skills.
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:02):
Later on could we compose our 500 words of book review by using some of the sentences in our conversation
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:02):
Or shall we write the entire one with different styles and ways
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:02):
so do we need to distribute these jobs
涵兒 說 (上午 12:03):
Maybe it works.
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:04):
or we need to find someone to puzzle our discussion up
柳丁 說 (上午 12:06):
I do not know what the teacher wants
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:06):
haha
涵兒 說 (上午 12:06):
Me, either.....
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:07):
XDD
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:07):
She wants us to introduce the book
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:07):
and point out what's our favorite part of the book.
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:08):
so how shall we divide our work
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:08):
OK
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:09):
first, who is responsible to make a concise introduction of this book?
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:09):
and then
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:10):
some people do the middle parts
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:10):
what are our favorite parts
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:10):
this can use our diologues
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:10):
what do you think about
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:12):
Or we could compose it with the dialogue over here
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:12):
can we?
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:12):
I don't think it is a good idea to separate one article into four parts
涵兒 說 (上午 12:13):
Yes~
柳丁 說 (上午 12:13):
I think we can take advantage of the dialogues.
柳丁 說 (上午 12:14):
and write the chapter we liked
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:15):
yeah
涵兒 說 (上午 12:15):
OK
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:15):
this mentioned beforeXD
柳丁 說 (上午 12:15):
We can write the introduction, our favorite and impressed chapters, and then what we have used in our paper.
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:15):
YEAH
涵兒 說 (上午 12:16):
OK//
柳丁 說 (上午 12:18):
Do you mean that we have to introduce some main points in each chapter Each one provide introduction of some chapters
涵兒 說 (上午 12:19):
I agree.
柳丁 說 (上午 12:20):
So~
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:20):
So~
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:20):
the generanl introduction of this book
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:20):
genearl introduction
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:20):
I can organize that in the papers
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:20):
just like you need to introduce this book to other people
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:20):
by means of the dialogue
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:21):
and I would send them to one of you
涵兒 說 (上午 12:21):
That's all？
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:21):
and then send it to the third people
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:21):
and to the forth
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:21):
how about that
柳丁 說 (上午 12:21):
I think I can do that part myself
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:22):
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:04):
She wants us to introduce the book
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:04):
and point out what's our favorite part of the book.
涵兒 說 (上午 12:22):
Ｓｏ？
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:22):
ok
柳丁 說 (上午 12:22):
Ok
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:23):
what
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:23):
so we would do the separate part
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:24):
so who is going to combine ti
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:24):
it
柳丁 說 (上午 12:26):
We need to have the same introduction？
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:26):
the generanl introduction of this book
柳丁 說 (上午 12:27):
Sorry, I do not know what I should do now
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:27):
I will do that
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:27):
just like you need to introduce this book to other people
涵兒 說 (上午 12:28):
OH~
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:29):
only a person need to do that
柳丁 說 (上午 12:29):
Ok
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:30):
sopia will be responsible for the introduction
柳丁 說 (上午 12:31):
Thank you.
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:31):
then we need two person to organize our diologue
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:31):
and do the middle part
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:32):
to form the introduction
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:32):
explain some chapter that you think important
柳丁 說 (上午 12:32):
Ok. Claire and I can take it
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:32):
ok
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:32):
then i will do ....??
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:33):
haha
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:33):
you can form the introduction with me
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:33):
o k
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:33):
Ok
涵兒 說 (上午 12:34):
OK~
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:34):
deal
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:34):
good
涵兒 說 (上午 12:34):
thanks you
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:34):
it's close to the end
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:34):
so touching
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:34):
T^T
涵兒 說 (上午 12:34):
The End
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:34):
More than hours
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:34):
haha
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:34):
AND
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:35):
after we finish our parts
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:35):
we need to organize again
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:35):
to make the article smooth
涵兒 說 (上午 12:35):
OK
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:35):
and coherent
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:35):
when will you finish it
涵兒 說 (上午 12:36):
Mmm....
柳丁 說 (上午 12:37):
I would put them on blog before 1/2
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:37):
ok
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:37):
after we finish our parts
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:37):
just put the blogger
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:38):
and after the vacation
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:38):
we find some time to organize it
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:38):
~the end~
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:38):
yeah
柳丁 說 (上午 12:38):
See you.
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:38):
enjoy you vacation
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:38):
happt new year
涵兒 說 (上午 12:39):
Happy New Year!
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:40):
Bye
涵兒 說 (上午 12:40):
See you~
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:40):
bye
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:40):
remember to put the diologue in your blogger
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:41):
everyone needs it
Sorry for late.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:10):
恩恩
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:10):
沒關係
涵兒 加入對話。
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:11):
So that's start
柳丁 說 (下午 10:11):
Ok.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:11):
two hours discussiong
涵兒 說 (下午 10:11):
ok~
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:13):
so first of all
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:13):
As for me, I think that Chapter 18 "Writing about Film" is my favorite chapter
柳丁 說 (下午 10:13):
Me too.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:14):
And your report also impressed me.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:14):
MOVIE
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:14):
We could connect the chapter with "Understanding Movies"
涵兒 說 (下午 10:14):
It's good~
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:14):
Oh I am flattered
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:15):
haha
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:15):
I THINK
柳丁 說 (下午 10:15):
The clips you chose connect with our Film class.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:16):
Run Lora Run
涵兒 說 (下午 10:16):
When we are talking about movies, I think I would come up with Jerome Class~
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:16):
stewart also talks movie in the oral training class
涵兒 說 (下午 10:17):
It's impressive to see the same clips in different classes!
柳丁 說 (下午 10:18):
And analyze the photography. Just like what we do on Jerome's class.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:19):
but can't put more emphasis on movie
柳丁 說 (下午 10:20):
Yes. I think we can talk about some writing skill in the text book.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:21):
Our group is talking about "Writing about Literature".
柳丁 說 (下午 10:22):
There are some things have to do when we are going to write or analyze the literature work.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:22):
I think it also applies to our reading in English or American literature.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:23):
We need to know what the author wants to express first.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:23):
and provide our own interpretation.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:24):
Yes, and that's really important, too
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:24):
i think we can list some important writing skills
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:24):
yeah
柳丁 說 (下午 10:25):
Ok.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:26):
Recongnize your purpose.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:27):
The first main point in chapter 11 and chapter 12. (Description and Narration)
涵兒 說 (下午 10:28):
Put your purpose under arrangement
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:28):
yeah the writing skill
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:29):
argumentation
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:29):
decription
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:29):
By the way, we have to know who are the readers
涵兒 說 (下午 10:30):
To interest the readers~
涵兒 說 (下午 10:30):
with your own topic!
柳丁 說 (下午 10:30):
You need to make your readers be convinced.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:32):
Some experiences can support your perspective.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:33):
You are right
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:33):
so we have to divide our paper in many parts
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:34):
So we have to choose our subject carefully
柳丁 說 (下午 10:36):
Also, choose to describe things in objective or subjective way.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:37):
And supporting our ideas with some research.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:37):
yeah
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:37):
and try to convince audieance
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:37):
audience
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:38):
you really did point out the point
柳丁 說 (下午 10:38):
Make readers see what you have found out and feel as your feeling.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:39):
Yeah, things that can move us can have stonger impact in our heart
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:39):
It's just like Approach to American Literature
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:39):
HAHA
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:40):
and oral training
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:40):
gee gee
涵兒 說 (下午 10:41):
Yup~
柳丁 說 (下午 10:41):
HA~The same skills can be used in all the classes.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:42):
All roads lead to Rome.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:43):
WE DON'T CARE THAT MUCH
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:43):
HAHA
柳丁 說 (下午 10:45):
Besides, we can make our essays vivid by using sensory details.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:46):
yeah
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:46):
tha;t the description
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:46):
the chapter i report
柳丁 說 (下午 10:46):
Sight, hearing, smell
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:47):
so it's the writting skill
柳丁 說 (下午 10:48):
Always asking "WHY" is also important
涵兒 說 (下午 10:48):
And with some logic in writting skills.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:48):
After finishing writing the articles, we have to revise them.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:48):
"Ask Why"
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:49):
can be related to the Accounting class XD
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:49):
so that;s the chapter 5
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:50):
1. What is the most interesting part and persuasive point in your essay.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:50):
It is also needed when we are reading a story or poem.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:50):
2.Is your topic too broad or too narrow
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:51):
3. What aspects might need more work
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:51):
4.Does specific idea support your idea
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:51):
Give out your position
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:52):
That's what we have to check out
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:52):
I agree your point
涵兒 說 (下午 10:52):
Yup.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 10:52):
All of the writing skill could be used in different types of writing
柳丁 說 (下午 10:53):
Yeah. You listed the points we should pay attention to.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:53):
After writing, we also need to revise~
涵兒 說 (下午 10:55):
Many problems in sentence clarity involve errors in grammar, punctuation, word choice and usage.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:55):
How to organize your essay effectively is significant.
柳丁 說 (下午 10:55):
Sometimes the readers might have trouble to understand.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:56):
1. Give your sentences content.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:56):
2. Make your sentences specific.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:57):
3. Avoid overpacking your sentences.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:57):
4. Fix fragments
涵兒 說 (下午 10:58):
5. Pay attention to word order.
涵兒 說 (下午 10:59):
This is the important points in Chapter 6.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:59):
yeah
霈絃~ 說 (下午 10:59):
so it seems that we have lots of things to talk
柳丁 說 (下午 11:00):
That is talking about how to make our meanings clear in each sentences.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:00):
yes
涵兒 說 (下午 11:00):
I think developing a concise style is also important~
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:00):
tha's true
柳丁 說 (下午 11:02):
It is necessary to build argument when we are writing.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:03):
Explore the possibilities and your opinions.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:04):
Anticipate opposing views.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:04):
The classmates' comments are also very helpful~
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:05):
In chapter 10 for example, when writing an argumentation esay, we have to use "appropriate tone"
柳丁 說 (下午 11:05):
Just like what Claire and I do. We have different standpoint toward abortion.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:05):
yeah
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:05):
yeah
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:06):
different people can find out one another's weak point
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:06):
they could offer us some precious opinion
涵兒 說 (下午 11:07):
Yup~
柳丁 說 (下午 11:07):
And we also have to fight with each other to strengthen our viewpoint.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:09):
that;s right
涵兒 說 (下午 11:09):
Others' pointview can complement our views.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:09):
fight with othersXD
柳丁 說 (下午 11:10):
The point of view.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:10):
I usually fight with Elsa in the dorm. XXD
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:10):
XDD
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:10):
cool
柳丁 說 (下午 11:10):
No. That's not true~~~~
柳丁 說 (下午 11:11):
Haha
涵兒 說 (下午 11:11):
Since both of us are making the same topic.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:11):
I would so much like to hit my room mates
涵兒 說 (下午 11:11):
Ha~~
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:11):
by discussing your topics, I think you can really get some new ideas
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:11):
new concept
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:12):
YEAH
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:12):
i agree with it
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:12):
seeing the opposite point of views, you can find ways to "fight" back people that's in different position
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:13):
and other people will also give you advice
柳丁 說 (下午 11:13):
Yeah.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:14):
Maybe we can talk about some problems should be avoid.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:15):
grammar false
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:15):
unorganized article
涵兒 說 (下午 11:16):
wrong word choice.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:16):
Sudden change in perspective.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:19):
Chapter20
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:19):
It also pointed out some problems about errors in grammar
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:19):
yap
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:20):
In Chapter 21,also, talks of the importance of using punctuation
涵兒 說 (下午 11:20):
Yes~
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:21):
that's also the problems we should avoid
涵兒 說 (下午 11:21):
It does help~
柳丁 說 (下午 11:22):
Yes. It is the basic problems we should pay attention to.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:22):
But after getting lots of information in writing skills, I think when I start to write something, I still lose some points.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:24):
It is hard to achieve all the points, so we have to learn and revise.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:24):
Revising is important
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:26):
so we need to overcome these obstacles
柳丁 說 (下午 11:27):
The order of time and space the transitional words are needed to be consider. (Chapter 3)
柳丁 說 (下午 11:28):
Repetition of key words~
柳丁 說 (下午 11:29):
When we arrange the paragraphs
涵兒 說 (下午 11:31):
To present a clear thesis.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:37):
The beginnings and endings are the main factors to attract the readers.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:38):
Mmmm.....
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:38):
YES
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:39):
YEAH
涵兒 說 (下午 11:39):
Don't introduce new points or irrelevant material.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:39):
you guys really point out many ideas
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:39):
but we think we need to organized them
柳丁 說 (下午 11:40):
Ok.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:41):
Yup~
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:42):
oh
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:42):
by the way
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:42):
I THINK THAT
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:43):
Chapter 14 is really important
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:43):
YEAH
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:43):
I learned the style this semester
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:44):
that's what teacher focus on
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:44):
why
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:44):
before, I would just post the website
涵兒 說 (下午 11:44):
Ok~
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:44):
or simply paste the name of the author
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:44):
and would not do it in the rigt form
柳丁 說 (下午 11:45):
It is also important to search the online databases with concise keyword.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:45):
It's important to have work cited.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:47):
I usually ignored the citation in the past, too.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:48):
It's easy to forget
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:49):
haha
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:49):
take advantage of the websites
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:49):
the digital resourses
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:50):
yeah
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:51):
So shall we start to organize our conversation
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:53):
ok
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:53):
First of all, we have to discover our writing. We have to change our style of writing and the form of composing our works so as to meet different readers request.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:54):
Organize our writings with clear thesis statement, and remenber do not be vague in the writing.
涵兒 說 (下午 11:55):
We can make our paper better by revising.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:55):
Pay attention to our writings by using precise words and punctuation.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:55):
Avoid grammar and puntuation problems.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:55):
Do not confuse the readers.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:56):
Class discussion is also important. We can talk with our friends about our topics.
蘇菲亞 說 (下午 11:56):
Everyone of us may point out the strong and weak point of our works.
柳丁 說 (下午 11:57):
Organize each paragraph logically. Make the argument and your interpretation clearly.
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:57):
yeap
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:57):
so let's divide our discussion into many parts
霈絃~ 說 (下午 11:58):
first, the general ideas about this book?? whcih parts affect you the most
柳丁 說 (上午 12:01):
Some general ideas have mentioned before.
涵兒 說 (上午 12:01):
I think the book gives me a useful skills about writing; And I think all of the parts are essential for me to develop the issue. Different parts focus on different skills.
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:02):
Later on could we compose our 500 words of book review by using some of the sentences in our conversation
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:02):
Or shall we write the entire one with different styles and ways
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:02):
so do we need to distribute these jobs
涵兒 說 (上午 12:03):
Maybe it works.
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:04):
or we need to find someone to puzzle our discussion up
柳丁 說 (上午 12:06):
I do not know what the teacher wants
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:06):
haha
涵兒 說 (上午 12:06):
Me, either.....
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:07):
XDD
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:07):
She wants us to introduce the book
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:07):
and point out what's our favorite part of the book.
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:08):
so how shall we divide our work
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:08):
OK
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:09):
first, who is responsible to make a concise introduction of this book?
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:09):
and then
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:10):
some people do the middle parts
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:10):
what are our favorite parts
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:10):
this can use our diologues
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:10):
what do you think about
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:12):
Or we could compose it with the dialogue over here
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:12):
can we?
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:12):
I don't think it is a good idea to separate one article into four parts
涵兒 說 (上午 12:13):
Yes~
柳丁 說 (上午 12:13):
I think we can take advantage of the dialogues.
柳丁 說 (上午 12:14):
and write the chapter we liked
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:15):
yeah
涵兒 說 (上午 12:15):
OK
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:15):
this mentioned beforeXD
柳丁 說 (上午 12:15):
We can write the introduction, our favorite and impressed chapters, and then what we have used in our paper.
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:15):
YEAH
涵兒 說 (上午 12:16):
OK//
柳丁 說 (上午 12:18):
Do you mean that we have to introduce some main points in each chapter Each one provide introduction of some chapters
涵兒 說 (上午 12:19):
I agree.
柳丁 說 (上午 12:20):
So~
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:20):
So~
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:20):
the generanl introduction of this book
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:20):
genearl introduction
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:20):
I can organize that in the papers
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:20):
just like you need to introduce this book to other people
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:20):
by means of the dialogue
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:21):
and I would send them to one of you
涵兒 說 (上午 12:21):
That's all？
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:21):
and then send it to the third people
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:21):
and to the forth
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:21):
how about that
柳丁 說 (上午 12:21):
I think I can do that part myself
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:22):
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:04):
She wants us to introduce the book
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:04):
and point out what's our favorite part of the book.
涵兒 說 (上午 12:22):
Ｓｏ？
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:22):
ok
柳丁 說 (上午 12:22):
Ok
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:23):
what
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:23):
so we would do the separate part
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:24):
so who is going to combine ti
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:24):
it
柳丁 說 (上午 12:26):
We need to have the same introduction？
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:26):
the generanl introduction of this book
柳丁 說 (上午 12:27):
Sorry, I do not know what I should do now
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:27):
I will do that
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:27):
just like you need to introduce this book to other people
涵兒 說 (上午 12:28):
OH~
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:29):
only a person need to do that
柳丁 說 (上午 12:29):
Ok
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:30):
sopia will be responsible for the introduction
柳丁 說 (上午 12:31):
Thank you.
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:31):
then we need two person to organize our diologue
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:31):
and do the middle part
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:32):
to form the introduction
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:32):
explain some chapter that you think important
柳丁 說 (上午 12:32):
Ok. Claire and I can take it
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:32):
ok
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:32):
then i will do ....??
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:33):
haha
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:33):
you can form the introduction with me
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:33):
o k
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:33):
Ok
涵兒 說 (上午 12:34):
OK~
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:34):
deal
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:34):
good
涵兒 說 (上午 12:34):
thanks you
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:34):
it's close to the end
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:34):
so touching
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:34):
T^T
涵兒 說 (上午 12:34):
The End
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:34):
More than hours
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:34):
haha
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:34):
AND
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:35):
after we finish our parts
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:35):
we need to organize again
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:35):
to make the article smooth
涵兒 說 (上午 12:35):
OK
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:35):
and coherent
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:35):
when will you finish it
涵兒 說 (上午 12:36):
Mmm....
柳丁 說 (上午 12:37):
I would put them on blog before 1/2
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:37):
ok
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:37):
after we finish our parts
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:37):
just put the blogger
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:38):
and after the vacation
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:38):
we find some time to organize it
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:38):
~the end~
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:38):
yeah
柳丁 說 (上午 12:38):
See you.
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:38):
enjoy you vacation
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:38):
happt new year
涵兒 說 (上午 12:39):
Happy New Year!
蘇菲亞 說 (上午 12:40):
Bye
涵兒 說 (上午 12:40):
See you~
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:40):
bye
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:40):
remember to put the diologue in your blogger
霈絃~ 說 (上午 12:41):
everyone needs it
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